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    dots Submission Name: The vein of golddots
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    Author: muhammed
    ASL Info:    23/male/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 87/124/111
    Words: 443
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe vein of golddots
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    "how men get so blind
    for didn't see the vein of gold
    they leave behind"






    not so attractive, not so pretty,
    nor much wealth,
    she passed unnoticed - by love- but with pity,
    all but time; the thief of youth lord,
    how pity no one ,who quickly have sore,
    leaving her, in the same mold,
    without a memory ,without a story to be told
    nor experience of what will come,
    of agony nights anguish,
    or cruel winter languish..

    just unseen wrinkles woven,
    and tear into the eyes, frozen.

    she sits by me, nodding...
    a song of loneliness,
    and I, unwilling, helpless,
    keep watching her sinking fire,
    while she suffers herself to be desired,
    searching into the faces and the eyes
    for any chance of love, or to be admired.

    day by day time keeps steals a way
    she smiles..but inside she's terrified

    she go on living with the fear
    that she ,unknown- alone- she going to die
    with lips that are dry
    and a heart that's never been held,
    All the dreams of love- kids- and home
    have gone by now and expelled,
    and left her here, alone in the cold,
    the cold of reality,
    that's all strangely focused:
    on her getting old

    and hopes that were ones gleams,
    are now fading so soon,
    and every day ends,
    in the same dark and lonely room,
    and all humanity are sleep,
    while she weeps, while she weeps




    Submitted on 2006-03-09 05:32:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love it, Three words to describe this, solitude, loneliness, despair, many poeple can relate to such a poem, including myself.
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by d_bc_0_0_p_e_r | [ Reply to This ]


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