Description: I was very sad the other night, and just sat there thinking, why couldn't it have been someone else?
Why'd It Have To Be...? -------------------------------------------
You said I was the first
The only woman you'd given your heart to
And I took you at your word
I gave everything to you
We talked until there were no words left
And I fell asleep in your arms
You gave me a sense of belonging that night
I knew you would keep me from harm
We made love for the very first time
You said it had never felt that way
I looked into your shining eyes
And I had no words to say
I did everything that I could do
To give you what you wanted
I fought wars that had no meaning
I made mistakes by which I'm haunted
You wanted me to have your child
We made a home together
I tasted happiness for the very first time
I thought it would last forever.
As suddenly as it began, it was over
Caused by something only you could see
All I have left is a question never answered
Why'd it have to be me?
If you reverse some of the parts to making the character male, I can say I've been in the situation once and it sucked at the end. So this one touches a bit of soft spot.
It's good, and the lines, "I fought wars that had no meaning/I made mistakes by which I'm haunted", if I can't connect directly with anything else in this poem, I can at least with these two lines. And I don't really think I need to go on, as this is excellently written as it is and doesn't require a lot of interpretation, it simply requires more empathizing than anything.
wow yet another great write this one is what i'm expecting wiv the guy i'm with @ the moment and if we do break up i know its gonna be sop hard to let him go easy coz he's given me somthing that i can't have without him been here get me?lol nah didn't think so... I KNOW WHAT I MEANT! lol anyway take care Izzi XxX P.S. another faves addition lol
THis line just blew me away. I love it and I think that it completely makes the poem GREAT...again, I could see all this in my head. I remember me and Eric in one room and you and Tony in another. I can't decide if I was happy then or not; I feel so strange about Tony, I think I hate him.
Oh, I'm so sorry for you. This was a good write, from the soul. I think you should give it to him... I'm think that this is definately going to be a favorite and I don't have that many, so count yourself lucky. No, I'm just kidding, but this really was a deep, and meaning write. Good job and please keep writing.
Very emotional and sad. It was like the rugged was snatch from under the person's feet here in this poem. I liked the free verse of this and the flow of it. I think you did a great job writing this.
Submission Name: Why'd It Have To Be...?
