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    dots Submission Name: The Warriordots

    Author: Darkstar9500
    ASL Info:    18/male/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 39/56/19
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       No idea why I wrote this one. I guess it's because I was thinking about swords yesterday. Swords fasinate me. A tool that is used to take life away or just hold in you hand. I don't know why I want this power. But it makes me feel good to know that I have it. Creepy I know.

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    dotsThe Warriordots

    Dark flame engulfs
    Swords sing in the rain
    Swords strike
    Strikes of lightning
    Dark shapes in the distance
    Spilling their red life

    The storm of rain
    and steel ceases
    One remains
    Kneeling in his red pool
    His face hidden in the darkness
    hidden from himself

    Adding his own sorrows to the pool
    Questioning everything,
    that everyone wouldn't
    Heart and mind racing
    Walking away for the next fight
    Always asking the same question,

    Submitted on 2006-03-09 09:48:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      GREAT! Stunning motives, the theme, the idea, the style all of it really caught my attention. I like this genre and i think you succeeded in catching the essence of this spectacular brainstorm.
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW! ok, I OFFICIALLY have been reminded of your deep emotional states. I think that you should keep writing, it was amazing! Thanks for giving me the chance to see even more into your soul. I understand how you feel about things being tough, its hard for me too. But I know why you do the things you do, I can answer all your questions, if you let me... I love you! Jenn @>->-
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by BreakAndFall | [ Reply to This ]
      its good and i like how it a has this feel of a long story slimed down so that the people like me can read it and be very interested

    its very deataled and i like that

    please read some of my stuff and comment
    jenn is creepy
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by bloodied_angel | [ Reply to This ]

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