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    dots Submission Name: A Sisters Tears.dots
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    Author: SorrelsReality
    ASL Info:    25/ Female/ See Quote.
    Elite Ratio:    6.52 - 175/113/20
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I'm not even sure if this will make sense to anyone else but me. I lost my sister this week and I'm beyond the words to describe how this feels, I just wrote.


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    dotsA Sisters Tears.dots
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    He giveth and He taketh away

    How I know those words in my heart at this moment.

    Never again will I hear her voice
    Watch her smile, or laugh.
    See her tears, comfort her pain.

    She's gone.

    I feel so empty inside, my own heart echoing each muffled beat
    Taunting me, playing with each tear stained note
    Singing me that overplayed 'sad' song

    Here I sit, helpless and lost

    Why would God give me a sister, only to take her away?
    Though I wish to lash out at Him, I can't let my faith falter
    When I cry, He cries with me
    When I'm in pain, He feels such pain with me.

    What a lesson to learn
    This feeling of loss, grieving her life
    So vibrant and full.

    I hear the clock ticking loudly throughout the room
    Yet time, stands completely still.

    Is this real?




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      If/when you have children then you will see your sister live in them, in wrinkles, for we are blended.
    Woe to your loss - through your sharing you are sister to us all...
    | Posted on 2006-11-17 00:00:00 | by Beekeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so very sad, and it is beautifully written with so much feeling! Your reader crys for you and with you!
    | Posted on 2006-11-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I am so sorry you lost your sister! My heart goes out to you! This was so hert felt that it almost made me cry. I choked it back and gave a small prayer for you.
    kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-10-27 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Why would God give me a sister, only to take her away?

    That is sort of the same question I ask every single day. Why would God give us family, and friends, and then take them away from us? It doesn't make since to me.

    I see that you must have a strong relationship with god, and after losing someone who you really loved, it made it hard to stay that way with him. That was the interpretation I got out of it.

    Your poem is beautiful, even though it made me want to cry.
    | Posted on 2006-06-19 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      When I cry, He cries with me
    When I'm in pain, He feels such pain with me.

    That is such a beautiful picture of your relationship with God.

    My words will be few, as for a piece like this what could I possibly say to comfort such a loss. When I have struggled through times like these a friend of mine has always told me to be thankful to God for it. ANd how that has tormented my soul, to thank God for such pain and sorrow, but she is right. And I knew it was right, and so I have... cried to God and begged Him to comfort my heart, I can't express with words how I prayed, all I can say is that my heart was hear aloud in Heaven, and He swiftly answered my call. I do hope that your faith does not falter, stay strong and wait for the bigger picture.

    Love in Christ,
    Tom
    | Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was very moving and beautifully written and described by you. One can only imagine what you are going through.

    I bet your sister is up in heaven reading your lovely testament to her.

    My condolences and sympathy is with you.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I can't let my faith falter
    When I cry, He cries with me
    When I'm in pain, He feels such pain with me.

    beautiful, and you're right. though He allows us to be hurt, He hurts with us.

    i'm here for whatever you need.
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      Loss of a loved one is so hard. Thank you for continuing to be so open. So many parts of this piece remind me of my hurt and anger, my questioning God, while trying not to let my faith falter. Those last 3 lines at first seemed misplaced, but the more I read, the more they grow on me, and remind me of my own reaction to loss. My cousin committed suicide about 6 years ago. She was a few years younger than me, but I looked up to her. I identified with her so much, and I was looking forward to spending time with her after I finished college. I didn't get that chance, and I feel that I didn't express to her how much I loved her.
    Keep Sharing,
    because I know at least one person is blessed,
    but I'm sure God is using you to bless many.
    God Bless You,
    Aric
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]


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