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    dots Submission Name: War!dots
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    Author: Crow
    ASL Info:    24/f/Georgia
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 410/475/72
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 934
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    Description:
       xD Hehe. Just a joke between friends. Wrote this in like a minute. :P


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    dotsWar!dots
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    I'm at war, war I say!
    War with a friend so dear
    She's raging, racing, rearing up
    Preparing for assault!

    Batten down the hatches!
    Hide down in a hole!
    When Kate get's a goin
    You're best to duck real low.

    It's worse this time
    worse than ever before
    why, it's so bad it's ghastly!
    Worse than the Chocolate War!

    Started by an image
    that Crow posted innocently
    A telegram came ringing in
    "TO WAR TO WAR TO WAR!"

    Here comes the attack!
    Hide your heads!
    They're dropping down...
    KaBOOM, KaBLAM, KaBLAST!

    You'll never win you scoundrel!
    You'll never win I say!
    Be prepared, for my counterattack
    You'll never see it coming!

    (Well of course unless you read this
    then you'll know right off the bat
    Egads! What am I doing?!
    I'd best stop writing just this minute.)




    Submitted on 2006-03-09 11:27:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What fun! I hope you don't get defeated too quickly! And if you win, you should dance around yelling, "I win, I win, I win!" It's the only thing to do! Good luck!
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this
    It is a credit to your writing skills that this flowed so well and really did interact with a real war
    Great Write
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Hah, I liked this one very much. It shows that you wrote it in a very short period of time, as it does not look very well planned out. It kept a good pace and high energy throughout. I liked the fact that the battlefield was considered as Kate's temper, it was a funny picture in my head.
    Wishing for More
    ~Brian
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
      Very funny and true to form of a battlefield of war. I think your ending kinda swayed off from your original flow, and there were times your rhyming was lost, but overall this was very good. Inside jokes make for some of the best poems I feel. It sounds like your Kate got a temper unmatched yet. lol. I think the ending was quite funny, you realized you gave yourself away...very funny. I liked this one alot. Godd job.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      haha! Cute. I like the ending, I do that all the time. Classic joke, no? you can kind of tell it was written pretty quickly, but I believe for jokes it doesn't matter about anything but the joke itself. Good luck in the war!
    ~Kat
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]


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