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    dots Submission Name: Lost Hopedots
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    Author: devbru86
    ASL Info:    19/M
    Elite Ratio:    1.95 - 11/14/8
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Bytes: 607



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    dotsLost Hopedots
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    In a world where nothing seems real
    There's no where to hide
    No one to feel
    You don't know where to go
    But you know you feel it inside

    Do you ever close your eyes?
    Just to be with me
    Dream of you and I
    Of what was meant to be
    Now take it all away
    But you know you feel it inside

    All alone in this world of mine
    Try to get free of it all
    All alone, Im caught this time
    Now its my turn to fall
    Look at the fear in my eyes
    But you know I can feel it inside




    Submitted on 2006-03-09 11:34:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      well the first stanza was great it rymed good to but the next to like didnt ryme as good...maybe change it around a bit...


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    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]


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