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    dots Submission Name: burn the witchdots

    Author: bloodied_angel
    ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.63 - 79/119/44
    Words: 249
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 663
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsburn the witchdots

    Angels tears and tangeled hair.
    Her demons heart is asking,
    all the questions no ones answered,
    And no one understands.

    Of all the blood shes poured out,
    of the pain that stopes her breathing,
    of the hate and the lonleyness,
    and in all this time why no one noticed.

    They blame it on the tv,
    they blame it on the songes,
    they blame it on the father,
    they blame it on the mom.

    They say its her,
    they say its her boyfriend,
    they say its the drugs,
    they say its the friends.

    Its one thing its another,
    its her fault, its anothers,
    its not real, she wants attention.
    Her quetions stands,
    if you paid attention why would she be looking for it.

    Give her more drugs,
    make her tell you,
    how much she hates you,
    take away her friends,
    give her more resons,
    to run from you and to ask her quetion.

    Why is it so hard for you just it sit and lisen?
    To understand the things she done,
    because you've done them too.

    "Ask yourself, will I burn in hell
    then write it down, and cast it in the well
    there they are, the mob it cry for blood
    to twist the tale, into fire wood
    fan the flame, with a lie
    then turn your cheek, till the fire dies
    the skin it peels, like the truth away
    what it was i will never say....."

    Submitted on 2006-03-09 11:51:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'll hafta agree with lori_tab, it was boring. IT wasn't my taste either, it seemed to "teen angst" or whatever you wanna call it. It kinda made no sense either, then again, I have no room to talk cuz my stuff doesn't either. But everyone's always looknig for an answer. So, hey, it was long and bland, but you tried.

    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Desser | [ Reply to This ]
      this was long and sort of not my taste. personally i didn't really like it only because I wan't interested...but I mean there is nothing wrong with it. It's written well and it seems that you've written with passion.
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Maybe if rewrite this piece and shorten it took care of the spelling errors and structued so that is isn't so rambling it could every well be a good write kid,anyway thats just my thoughts on this nothing personal,please keep up the writes we all have room to improve
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
      Well I do understand...This was well written...a little ranty but we are all guilty of that. The only complaint I have is spelling errors. That always turns me off to a poem. Like it is songs, not songes, or stops, not stopes. Lonliness not lonelyness. But anyways the first few stanzas were really lovely. Nice job dear.
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by beldolore | [ Reply to This ]

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