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what love is to a broken heart


Author: bloodied_angel
ASL Info:    15/Female/Oklahoma
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Words: 12
Class/Type: Personal Quotes /BrokenHeart
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what love is to a broken heart



love is good
love is great
love is nothing but tanted hate




Submitted on 2006-03-09 12:08:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Thats really cool but short... maybe you can work on it... i like it a lot, and short isn't always bad.read my poem call "Heart" it might insipre you to enlarge your poem.
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Linkins_knot | [ Reply to This ]
  Tanted hate, eh? Why so? Why is love good? Why is love great? Why is this so short of a poem? If you wanna call it a poem. I think I'm gonna hafta be a little "not me" with this one. Where is this piece? Is it unfinished? Is it just a random "whatever" poem? Seriously, tho, what's up with it? Can there be more? I think so.

Desser
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by Desser | [ Reply to This ]
  Surprisingly, but not in a bad way, short. You got to the point. Which is good, because some artistrs get so caught up in teh language that they forget the point they're trying to get across...although I suppose that, too, could be interesting. I dunno. Do you mean tainted, though?
Rae
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by losing_focus | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice piece put together, however it lacks the essence. But I do agree nobody has been able to really define this complex emotion...Its a nice effort all the same. I hope to write about Love someday when I'nm ready...
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by jyots | [ Reply to This ]


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