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    dots Submission Name: Choosing Memoriesdots
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    Author: tmullins
    ASL Info:    37/F/Mo
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 127/149/41
    Words: 199
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsChoosing Memoriesdots
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    There are certain parts of my life
    that are as clear as day.
    Things that I want to remember,
    and things that won't go away.

    These memories float thru my mind,
    of days that have gone by.
    Memories I try to hide
    from every prying eye.

    I remember my first time,
    that memory won't go away.
    I see it all so clearly,
    like it was yesterday.

    I remember a small wedding.
    A typical divorce too.
    The years that lie there inbetween,
    those memories are so few.

    Take my memories.
    Take them far away.
    Throw them from a mountain top
    back to yesterday.

    I can't remember the fun times.
    Some of the sad ones are gone too.
    In the mirror I see the lines
    that prove I have seen a few.

    Let me pick and choose
    the memories that will stay.
    The ones that I won't lose.
    The ones I treasure every day.

    My children being born
    The family bar-b-que
    Our first family vacation
    Each child turning two.

    I'm glad to have the memories
    I do try to hide the pain
    If only the good memories
    were the only ones to remain.




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      This is a good grown up or serious poem. It seems as though you were trying to depict your entire life here. I liked the rhyme scheme it kind of helps to convey an allege sense of tranquility.

    I do think that the Thru in the second stanza undermines the seriousness of the piece . That was a bit annoying.

    On the other hand, I admit that I relate to this. Im the kind of person that tends to be pessimistic thus exacerbate the bad things of every given situation and Im saying this due to many times have I craved for disentangling myself from bad experiences so as to recall only the good stuff but my mind works in such a way that negativity tends to overpower me every now and again I do endeavour to see things differently but is hard .

    I like the last stanza that was terribly moving and telling it kind of describes the feeling I have gotten during those countess sleepless nights in which I muse upon life and everything that is wrong with it.

    I apologize if this sounds as I were venting or wallowing in economy size vat of self pity :)

    Good luck,

    Warm regards,

    Ethan.
    | Posted on 2006-03-12 00:00:00 | by Ethan Brody | [ Reply to This ]


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