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    dots Submission Name: back in the day (verse one)dots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 504
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsback in the day (verse one)dots
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    it's sad the way it is now
    I won't shed a tear
    your fucking Ideals, foul
    I must persivere
    I remember back in the day
    nobody really cared
    what you were, or what you'd say
    just a big game of truth or dare
    but that's all over
    now everybody gets offended
    at me, my urban clothing
    I'm not to be surrendered
    man, shit was crazy
    the shit we used to do
    went purple hazy
    however, out came what was true




    Submitted on 2006-03-09 14:19:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Yo,
    this joint is hot, thanks for putting me on to this one. This was a great read, it really got going on the end. "now everybody get offened at me, my urban clothing... Y our style makes me want to step out the box wit some of my rhymes.
    *Keep up the great work*

    Singlerose:)
    | Posted on 2006-03-12 00:00:00 | by SingleRose | [ Reply to This ]
      this was better. u did pretty well with the whole "short line" flow. i like u flowing about real [censored] instead of just rapping about shooting people and [censored]. this is another one going on my fave list
    | Posted on 2006-03-12 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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