Eggs are laid, women are laid. You actually need the form "lay" here in your poem as the past tense of "lie", i to be prone or supine next to you. God knows what her plums were that you ate. Here in Gondwanaland we have melons.
The 1st stanza is very cool. I really like the sentiment in the second stanza, but I think you should do more. The 1st line of the second stanza I believe should stay. Also maybe add a 3rd stanza. Just a thought.
i can definitely see why you say that william carlos williams inspires you.. i'll probably be looking through your older poems when i'm at work.. there's a lot to go through :) thanks for pointing this one out to me.. definitely a favourite.. this style needs nothing more- it is perfect in of itself.