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Good or Bad

Author: Fraser
ASL Info:    26
Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 30 /55 /35
Words: 155
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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someone who chooses between good actions and bad.

Good or Bad

I battle this sir with silver sword in hand
he challenges me with all things bad
In his hand is a wonderful candy cane
which twirls and spins like in the barber shops paine
he has a presence about him that rolls in like a fog
charm and chramisa follow him like a dog
good or bad he says after seeing my face
I say good to him and then he gives chase
the man catchs up and stands tall with top hat
His rosy cheeks glisten all plump and all fat
He temps me with gifts of power and of fame
i say no to these offers again and again
He temps with roses and a brand new car
the things that he shows me wont get me too far
He gets annoyed and waves his hands in disgust
my actions have won as my swords lost its rust

Submitted on 2006-03-09 17:51:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was absolutely incredible (except for the spelling of charisma, but thats okay!) I could see a boy being tempted by this modern devil, adorned spectacularly, offering gifts. In all honesty, the title almost dissuaded me from reading, but I am glad I did. Well done!
| Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by beldolore | [ Reply to This ]
  this was neato spidito. i liked it a lot because it was cute and creative and all that good stuff.

In his hand is a wonderful candy cane

love that line.
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]

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