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    dots Submission Name: Twistdots
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    Author: jyots
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 14/13/16
    Words: 203
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 199
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       any thing welcome....I wrote this piece when I was feeling down in the dumps..When I'd broken up with my EXXXXX


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    Shrouded like a vague mystery,
    I'm trying to reach deep within,
    Searching, Seeking answers for queries,
    But I don't where to begin.

    Battling with the hurt and pain,
    The tears,angst,pretence and lies,
    Losing the battle to my battered heart,
    As I rerun the emotions once again.

    I closed the doors to my heart,
    He had the map,still he lost his way,
    I don't want to travel back with him,
    To relive the chapters of yesterday.

    I said " Its not enough to love only"
    Or hold me when you go to sleep ,
    I'm better than your stolen kisses,
    I need something deeper than deep.

    Still he was quiet, he wouldn't tell,
    He knew best,best only to conceal,
    He just stared at me,with his lips silent,
    Numb, he did not want to reveal.

    I say no more, I say I'm through,
    My heart whispers slowly "Enough"
    It wasn't real for him,he walks away,
    I know for him,it really was not Love.

    Time has passed by, he has moved on,
    In the arms of someone, a new story,
    And I too have found my salvation,
    With a perfectly shy new somebody.










    Submitted on 2006-03-09 18:39:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      "to relive the chapters of yesterday"
    I enjoyed that line very much...THis piece has me a little torn. I love the flow and its wonderfully written. Yes, I am no longer torn, I like it...I was contemplating the creativity because pain is so much easier to write than joy, but this is very good.
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by beldolore | [ Reply to This ]
      that is how things have been for me now to present day exactly. its like your in my head! :)
    yes this one was definitely better than the first i read this one going on my favorite list too!
    keep writing for sure!
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by chaos_flame | [ Reply to This ]



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