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    dots Submission Name: Wishful thinkingdots
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    Author: jyots
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 14/13/16
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 211
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       I was feeling kinda sentimental...Staring at the amazing star studded sky, with the full moon..so i just had to write it....


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    dotsWishful thinkingdots
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    Slowly as the day turns into night,
    As the darkness takes over the light,
    The moon emerges from the shadows,
    And million stars begin to shine.

    Even in this lovely night,
    I'm alone,you're not in sight,
    I fumble, I cry out,
    The emptiness echoes with a shout.

    With the stars up on high,
    I stare at the luminated sky,
    I see a star shining so bright,
    Small but displaying a dazzling light.

    I stare hard, the star twinkles more,
    Slowly all my miseries, I let go,
    It seems to say,you miss me too,
    And you're wishing I was also with you.






    Submitted on 2006-03-09 18:50:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh, wow. I found myself under the sky, starring into the beautifulness of the blackness. I do have a problem with the second stanza, it doesn't flow as well as the rest of them. But well done, way to put the reader at the scene!
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by beldolore | [ Reply to This ]
      that was very cool. ive been under those same stars with those same thoughts once before. that feeling of lonliness. it suxs! this is defintely going on my favorites. keep writing!
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by chaos_flame | [ Reply to This ]



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