Description: Just your thoughts would be nice. Let me know if it paints a picture and if it does, what does it look like?
Spreading her wings -------------------------------------------
She is eight and faces a world of uncertainty. She is in the third grade and has seen eight different schools. Never had a chance to have a real friend. Life has been turned upside down on more than one occasion.
Feelings of abandonment and frustration swallow her daily. Just wants to fit in. Always trying to win over a new group of kids and teachers alike. No one understands what goes on in that fragile little mind.
Letting go has become the normal goodbye. Never embracing the moment. Never allowed to just be a child. Children can be so mean at times. Not understanding the the implications of their words. The emotional cuts heal slowly for one so young. Only thing left is a scared hollow shell of the girl that once faced the world ready to spread her wings.
Such a difficult situation for so many children as I have seen over the years. In the small toddler years children are so happy and carefree, full of love and laughter. We guard, shelter and protect them from anyone hurting them in such a way. Then comes school, a child looks forward to this with anticipation. But some children gets broken very bad for years to come.(by other children) This can shape a child's life causing low-self esteem and feeling as a misfit. This are the children I would always try to take under my wings, let them be the leader in class plays, when I left the room let them be the one to take down names of those acting up while I was away. In the meantime emphasise to the class the importance of treating everyone equal and with the same respect they would like to be treated. My heart is with children, so this write stirred emotions in me. Truth indeed!!! Touching story,, ~Linda
This is a nice beginning to what could be a good story. This is very sad and tragic and the reader cannot help but empathize with this poor child. Not being able to be happy and carefree when you are a child is just tragic. She doesnt know how it feels to belong, she doesnt know any sort of consistency in her life. Moving frequently and not being able to establish roots in which to grow is hard for anyone at any age but for a young child it can have lifelong effects of insecurity. You did a nice job writing this. Take care.
It does paint a picture, for sure. I saw a very young girl with worried features, little self esteem, and constant fear of the newness around her. I felt her lack of grounding and sense of home. It was definitely an effective write. Left me pretty sad for her, in fact.
Drain_my_Blood seems to have really paid attention to this post. Very enlightening to be able to see into the world of a child like this. Takes a special person to slow down enough to see what ailes the youth. Countless children go throughout life with noone to help ease the pain. Good to see another that can take the time to see the troubles. I can see the girl and I can feel her frustration caused by things that are out of her control. I see the wanting look in her eyes screaming for that one understanding voice to break the window of confusion with the hammer of clarity. Do you part and be the hero. Peace.
this is such a sad story but so familiar. their is always the child who never fits in - nomatter how hard she trys. will she be lift cold & alone. well, only time will tell. as a teacher the best thing would be to remind the childeren that they are special people. and never give up on them, even though the world has.
kids can be so cruel... it scares me actually... im sure we werent THAT mean when i was at school (though we prolly were when it wasnt aimed at me lol)
the thing about kids is... they all have their own struggles... this girl moved 8 times and had to make new friends... i had parents who divorced and a step mother who decided her life would be easier if i looked and dressed like a boy... try finding somewhere to fit in like that haha and i guess kids dont really think that someone else is struggling with something else too... so its like a defence thing as well as an out right mean thing in some ways...
this girl makes me sad though a life of constant goodbyes gets really tiresome and weary and i can sense that... the end and not spreading her wings no more... that was heartbreaking
i guess parents dont always think through the implications their decisions have on their kids...thats sad but its just one of the many facts of life...
so i liked this piece... you felt more in her shoes and cliché free here which is awesome... well done!
The image was painted perfectly, I could picture a little girl moving from place to place unable to stop and achieve the life shes dreamed of to have real friends to be able to join new groups new clubs new sports but right when she begins to feel settled and comfortable where she is they move again for one reason or another , its sad really no child should have to deal with leaving every 2 weeks to a new place a new city a new school its horrible, it tears a child apart, I may not have any experience on the subject but i do watch my mother running from he rproblems daily i dont feel comfortable with ppl running from their issues, the more you run the more complicated your situation becomes its not that easy to do but soon enough youll have to face it. Also every child needs the chance to BE a child, acting grown up at age eight isnt right its hard to adjust to things like that, without a childhood you dont go through the ups and downs and stuff all kids should experience. Kids need to be kids.
anyways thats alot of writing its a great write thanks for sharing x0x Mickey x0x
Despite a few typos, in few brief paragraphs, you've managed to construct an image of a young girl crippled by low self-esteem, rejected by her peers and miserably sad as a result of emotional neglect. Young birds that have been maimed can't spread their wings, rarely ever fly or leave the nest, and consequently are swaloowed alive by the world. This is sad and very honest. Nicely done. Take care of yourself. Bill.
Been there, had my childhood ruined... don' let it happen to her. I don't know your situation but make it work for her no matter what. I think it is bullcrap that people thinkm they can bring kids into this world and then give them crappy lives because they are too selfish to sit back and take it like a champ... mistakes don't ocme without reprecussions... like I said I don't know your situation so maybe this doesn't apply to you, but if it does, read carefully... it could change her life.