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    dots Submission Name: paint a picturedots

    Author: mimi
    ASL Info:    30/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597/390/111
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotspaint a picturedots

    I want to paint a picture
    of butterfly kisses
    on gentle Sunday mornings.
    A silver tray,
    with a long stemmed rose.
    A pot of tea and
    A delicate china cup.
    I want to paint a picture of
    a four poster bed,
    satin sheets.
    White laced curtains.
    The rays of the sun
    permeating the room,
    shining through the white curtains.
    I want to paint a picture of
    tender fingers that trace a line
    on my shoulder blades.
    To return my smile
    without unnecessary words.
    I want to paint a picture
    of calm, of peace and
    of a tranquil moment
    to look upon when
    I'm awakened by the glaring
    Sound of my alarm clock.
    or the loud angry voices
    of my fighting neighbors
    Through the thin paper walls of
    My apartment.
    I rush about, getting ready to
    face another day.
    Sustained by the image
    of gentle Sunday mornings
    a delicate china cup of tea.
    The scent of a long stemmed rose
    the filtered glow of sunlight,
    And a simple kiss.

    Submitted on 2006-03-09 20:43:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ohhhh..lovely indeed! a great imagery. i can see all this happening in front of me and it's so very delicately written. a fav for sure.
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm, this is beautiful. I like the imagery in it. It makes me picture everything you're writing. I like the first lines best though.
    | Posted on 2006-03-09 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]

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