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    dots Submission Name: Hole in the heartdots

    Author: keestu
    ASL Info:    32/male/Sydney
    Elite Ratio:    5.61 - 153/95/116
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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       One of my oldies.felt quite wierd teenage years.!!!

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    dotsHole in the heartdots

    There is a hole in the heart that remains open
    Remains open forever it seems
    For the time I've been waiting is too long
    The one that I thought was only in dreams
    Angels to see from one to thousands
    Who is the right one is difficult to find
    Searching am I for whom I don't know
    For whom I dreamt the heart so kind,
    For yet there remains the hole in the heart
    It hurts, hurts bad as sharp as a dart.

    Submitted on 2006-03-09 23:41:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked this poem because it seems like it came straight from your heart. And i can relate to it also. Because what i got out of it was that you have this person in your life that you thought was something in up hurting you. And your goimg through so much paiin And if i'm right about this poem i hope you heart wil fill up the hole you have in your heart. I really like it, it was very deep. Even thought it was shirt it said alot
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by Tash | [ Reply to This ]

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