A Farmers Rap by dax

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Submission Name: A Farmers Rap dots

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Author:	dax
ASL Info:	35 male BC Canada
Elite Ratio:	4.87 - 127/127/42
Words:	154

Class/Type:	Lyrics/Comedy
Total Views:	175
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	963

Description:
it is 11:15pm here and this just popped into my head. I don't know if i am jsut overly tired or what, but i had to make this.

took 2 minutes to write so i hope its not too bad

i know what it's like to be a farmer, i lived on my grandfathers for 2 years and helped him and my grandma with chores as well as neighbours

i also did haying and rock picking for farmers as a teen. hard work but really buffs you out

dax

A Farmers Rap dots

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See my field, see my hoe,
I work all day, hi my name is Joe.
Ferguson harvestin, in my field,
my tractor got bling
to increase the yield.

Work all day, almost all night,
get lousy return, it just ain't right.
You need food, you need me,
buy my produce
to set me free.

Birds, bugs, slimy slugs,
killin my livin, just lousy thugs.
I pray for sun, I pray for rain
I break my back
but ignore the pain.

Moo moo goes the cow,
if they don't milk, I make em chow.
Buck buck goes the bank
sell my eggs
so the farm don't tank.

Got a 100 hectares, got a shack,
if I don't make it, gotta give it back.
So please please think Farmer Brown,
buy my grub
please don't let me down.

darren a connell march 9, 2006

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  2 minutes well spent. Original with a nice rhythm and I especially like

Got a 100 hectares, got a shack,
if I don't make it, gotta give it back.

take care
nessie
| Posted on 2006-04-01 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]
  it seems like it was a homework assigment due in five minutes and you thought of something really quick. i gotta give you props it was a bit comical but when i read " a farmers rap" i was thinking Wierd Al Yankovich funny not dave chapelle funny.

a poet
Harmageddon
| Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Harmageddon | [ Reply to This ]
  Not bad at all for a quick effort. Sounds like something Cletus T Judd could work into a hit.

I think this piece has enough merit for a second pass. You might tighten up the rhythm in a couple of places and if you're serious about making it a publishable song, you'll need to make it longer.

Creative stuff,

Steve
| Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
  Pretty good for something you just jotted down. I would just take some of the extra words here and there out to fit in a continual rhthymn.
eg.2nd line-"hi"
2ndstanza, 2nd line-"get".

Mom moo goes the cow-really stands apart from the other lines. Funny, but also sounds like a line from a preschool book.

Interesting to see a rap about farming. Have you seen the Got Milk commercial with the farmers and cows?
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by fo | [ Reply to This ]
  Isn't it interesting how anything resembling farming, farmers, ranching, and cowboys, is automatically funny? I should know, I gew up in Wyoming.

Nice piece, a couple places might read better if you played with the rythm a bit, but for writing this in two minutes...it's good!

Thanks for the chuckle- they're always appreciated!

Take Care,

Chell
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
  Interesting. Id like to hear the music that went along with this! Im thinkin cotton eye joe or somethin, maybe combine harvester! Haha.
Still sort of funny - Areas didn't flow too well when i read it, but then i don't now how you hear it so i cant comment. This is all constructive btw.
I look forward to hearing it in the charts soon!

Mstr Rz
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by master raz | [ Reply to This ]

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