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    dots Submission Name: Masterpiece of Madnessdots
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    Author: Maverique
    ASL Info:    25/F/Own little world
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 408/446/119
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMasterpiece of Madnessdots
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    She was his muse
    his living work of art
    upon which he painted
    blooming bruises
    of nightmare-flavored blossoms.
    He painted her colorful;
    blues and blacks,
    yellows and greens,
    adding a dash of crimson here
    a ribbon of red there
    whenever it suited his mood.
    He sculpted her soft body,
    ruthlessly reworking
    its natural contours,
    and carved her spirit
    until she became
    a broken mannequin;
    a canvas for his twisted soul,
    Masterpiece of Madness




    Submitted on 2006-03-10 05:55:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this is really powerful. I hate to even think of domestic violence because I used to work in a battered women's shelter, and I had t quit because it disturbed me so much. The painting/ sculpture metaphors really work here, and I suppose some crazy man might consider it something like art to mold someone to what he wants. Anyway, this is excellent, Amy
    | Posted on 2006-03-31 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      I also love the story behind this..it was a very good way of telling it..you are a great poet. this was full of emottion and totally great. keep it up.

    my favorte lines were:
    "adding a dash of crimson here
    a ribbon of red there
    whenever it suited his mood.
    He sculpted her soft body,
    ruthlessly reworking"

    I am going to add this to my favorites..it is great.

    thanks for all your support with all the [censored] that i am going through..

    xoxox
    me

    p.s. ocme by and check out my new pieces please...
    | Posted on 2006-03-12 00:00:00 | by 2Numb | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the story of this...what I got was a girl who was willing to be anything the guy she was with wanted her to be...until it broke her and she was simply his property and lost her identity. Amazing! I love how unique and diffrent this is!
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by DragonflyKisses | [ Reply to This ]
      wow that was amazing the words u used were so discriptive and like cool i could almost taste them they were so rich with emotion (i gotta write that down =p) words like ruthlesly were cool to i liked the ajectives u used

    Rymes n/a
    Flow 9/10
    cool words 10/10
    emotion 10/10
    creativity 10/10
    orginality 10/10
    clearity 8/10
    overall 9.6/10
    WOW! i think thats the hightist yet! go check my other ratings ur blew them away!

    Trevor...~
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very different. You really brought the hurt that she felt being and object that he wanted to change. It just seemed to get a little tangled in the middle with all the colors. Good work though I really understood it.
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by bbcakes1115 | [ Reply to This ]
      It looks as if you are writing about a girl that is put under control by some unruling boyfriend. It was written to percision with its descriptions of the moods pf emotions.
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]



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