Welcome - I think you'll like it here at E.S. Lot's of good poetry and plenty of feedback on what you write. So, great to have you here and hope you stick around a while. Now, about your poem:
I like this. I think you have some talent. The ideas expressed are true and complete, The form used is suiting. Your opening line captures the interest of the reader. Your closing line makes a statement. Throughout there are interesting metaphors:
"pink infants baldly crowing
in unopened lives"
Did you mean to say "boldly", it works either way, just curious?
You say a lot about "Knowledge" and about living, about accepting challenges:
"mountains wait for climbing"
(an original way of expressing an old idea) that's working in some creativity.
"we have hands now, for making" "and minds to hold the taking"
Telling us to be of this moment, to live today, not wait for tomorrow. An inspiring message.
A very well written and original poem. I enjoyed reading it. Nice work.
Nice, fresh images. 'I'm not delusional', great thought. It's all temporary, let's give it our best effort anyway - the thought is echoed in much of the writing I see. I like the ideas and how well they are conveyed. This poem gets itself across very well. Maybe others can comment on the structure and word choices.
"I like this. I think you have some talent. The ideas expressed are true and complete, The form used is suiting. Your opening line captures the interest of the reader. Your closing line makes a statement."
those words are true it is a very complex and beautiful write, the metaphors fit in perfectly and with grace, it grabbed my attention right away and i couldnt have been so shocked in my life at how your write turned out. it is a beautiful piece and E.S should be proud to have you as one of their writers. I am glad you are a fellow poet you have great talent, your writing is spetacular.
keep up the great work lots of love x0x mickey x0x