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    dots Submission Name: I Cannot Have Youdots

    Author: Roberto Santos
    ASL Info:    18/Male/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.96 - 118/159/75
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsI Cannot Have Youdots

    When the sunlight troubled
    Your delicate and tender eyes
    The Gods themselves sought
    To diffuse it in the skies.

    When the rain pelted down
    And upset your cheerful thoughts
    The clouds moved away
    So that relief may be brought.

    With the forces of nature
    I can never hope to compete
    When even the mighty seek you
    I have to admit my defeat.

    For I cannot be worthy
    Of one so beautiful as you
    Against your high standards
    My virtues are very few.

    Submitted on 2006-03-10 11:20:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sad! I really think that the worth of yourself to someone else was displayed very well. I know in my experiences that there are times I fell like I just don't add up. Although I think everyone is worthy of someone and standards shouldn't put in the final decision. Great writing. Just remember you are worthy. Are they?
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by bbcakes1115 | [ Reply to This ]
      tender eyes wow thats a cool way to say it i dont get what defuse the skys mean though...but it sounds really cool i liked the ending most...but the whats the word virtues mean?
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
      That was an awesome poem. It was kind of sad! That poem was just so well written to me, I have NOTHING bad to say about it. The first stanza is my favorite. This poem should go in a book or something.lol. Great job!
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]

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