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the orbs


Author: owlman23
ASL Info:    29/m/al
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Not sure myself what this ones about. its one of those where the words are just there and I type them. Tell me what you think.


the orbs



Three smallish orbs glowing in the sunlight,
Sitting shining in the field even after midnight.
How is it that they keep their place?
Why have they not made escape?
Rolling far and rolling fast
Never would the wall they pass.
For round the field there grows the wall.
Hard gray substance of what one mayest call,
Perhaps say stone, but it seems more alive.
More living than rock for skyward it strives.
Higher each day it seems to be
For all to wonder for all can see.
Surely must there be a way
To save the orbs from this malady.
Climb one day the wall I might
If only to get a better sight
Of how it is the orbs just might
Escape the wall and win their fight.




Submitted on 2006-03-10 14:44:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a very interesting poem! I really have no idea what it may mean. When you read it, I thought it gave one the impression that you were really speaking your mind. This is just crazy guessing; but this is sort of what I pictured when I read your poem: There are three beautiful orbs, all different colors, surrounded by the walls of your heart, and the walls just keep going higher and higher...while the feelings inside whirl around and wonder how to go out. The longer they stay inside the growing wall, the higher the wall grows, until the orbs grow smaller and smaller until they finally dissapear. And until then, you just keep trying to scale the wall, and figure out how to say what you're trying to say...never mind. This is just random...I don't think that's what the poem really means at all. (I noticed though, that you spelled shining as shinning, but otherwise the spelling is fine.) Thanks for sharing this,
-dancer
| Posted on 2009-11-10 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]
  This feels like symbolism...I feel like going into a mad craze and trying to pick it all apart and tell you what i think it means...alas, no that is not what I shall do. It had a very nice tone that makes me think, early life. Very interesting write.
| Posted on 2006-03-21 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
  So, orbs, eh? Does this pertain to ghosties? If so, how awesome. Your rhyming is wonderful, I have to say, and hey good for you that you can rhyme, cuz I hate to try. So anywho, I see ghosts as these orb thingys and they are perhaps ghosts that are trying to get away and escape to Heavan perhaps, maybe, I don't know. That's what I see. I like it, good work.

Desser
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by Desser | [ Reply to This ]
  Where as this made no sense to me, I liked our rhyming. lol. I liked the flow and the way kept the focus on these 3 orbs. I think that this poem needs more clarity as to why the orbs are here, and what it means to them to escape and all. Other than that, nice little diddy.

Maggie
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  This write is actually quite beautiful
I believe though I may be wrong you were referring to the simalarity of an owls eyes and the stars and moon
I really like that vision
It is a vision of beauty
Great Write
God Bless
Ron

Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
Ron
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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