The Fire Rose by Darcey D

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Submission Name: The Fire Rose dots

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Author:	Darcey D
ASL Info:	17/f/mi
Elite Ratio:	2.76 - 50/78/42
Words:	72

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	201
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	423

Description:
i dont kno why i wrote this poem some things just dont have a reason or need of a description for me some things is an this is one of them

The Fire Rose dots

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The Fire Rose
Grows from your heart
Even if you are apart

From your family to your friends
You can always send your love to them

The passion is hot
But the flower will rot

If it does not have the sun
A laugh or some fun

The flower will wilt
And all that you built

Will be lost
At a teriible cost

Submitted on 2006-03-10 19:17:31 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!

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  Pretty much, I agree with slits-n-fits.

However, i would like to add that this is an amazing piece. Even the title is great.

As i commented on one of your other pieces, the riming makes me a bit uncomfortable. But on this one, it really does have an impact. You have a wondeful work with so much feeling and power to it, but it is somehow cheapened by the pattern.

It reminds me of "Your Rose Is Fading" a bit.

Some of the best poetry is that that has no reason, something just strikes you out of the clear blue.

Once again, this is a fabulous work! Keep it up. I will continue to read your works when i get time.

Please don't take anything i say to heart - i am not trying to rip the piece apart.
| Posted on 2006-03-27 00:00:00 | by Whildkaht | [ Reply to This ]
  Dear Darcey D,
I did like this, I agree with slits n fits that it was full of emotion. I think a little more could be added to it, but the problem is I dont know where. To me several stories came from this, and caused me to think quite a bit. I liked it and would like to know more about it.
-canarddoue
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by canarddoue | [ Reply to This ]
  You are very right about sometimes poems needing no true explination or desciption...but anyways back to the write...this was nice. i like the shorter poems(as long as they have umph)because they are quick to the point and cut out alot of unneccisary things. for some poems that is untrue..but for this one..it is great the way it is.
i disagree with canarddoue..it also made me think of so much and sparked my curiousity..but i dont want to know more about it..it draws me in and makes me want to read more of your works.
xoxox
me
p.s.check out some of my stuff sometime too.
| Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by 2Numb | [ Reply to This ]

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