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    dots Submission Name: Why Am I Still In Love?dots
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    Author: Qutedia7
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 54/70/31
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
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       Um, yeah i wrote this poem off the top of my head. U might think its sloppy, i dont care. Its just my heart laid out of paper. Try to comment. I want to know all opinions. Remember this write is free verse and came off the top of my head.


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    dotsWhy Am I Still In Love?dots
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    Sometimes i wonder why does he ignore me like that @ school maybe becasue he has things to do but i still want a hug and a hi from this special someone, I dont think he notices it but its so hard to see him w. her. We are over but i can't get over him and he was and is my 1st love. Its the hardest thing in the world is to watch someone you love, love someone else. I dunno why but maybe im not good enough for him but he is good enough for me if he just straightens up a bit. But who knows, God can only tell if we are meant to be together..... I love him so much but I don't think he notices.... All I can say is that Im still in love w. someone who isn't mine anymore.



    *If a kiss were a raindrop, I'd send you showers. If hugs were a second, I'd send you hours. . If love was a person, I'd send you me. *




    Submitted on 2006-03-10 21:19:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this poem thing, because i am to going through the same thing you are, it was scary, because what ur saying bascially happened to me exactly... good work... and keep writing.

    ~hannah~
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by seriouscutter19 | [ Reply to This ]
      well not well organized i think the use of "2" instead of "to" and "4" instead of "for" dont help much the readers.. well keep on writing and that is my suggestion and take care please!
    and if you have time please take a lok to my writing..
    peace and love!
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      powerful. true. mindblowing. this is how i describe this poem. you really reached out to me. i too am going through what you are and its nice to see someone express it through their writing that i'm not the only one out there. i love how you put a positive ending when you said

    God can only tell if we are meant to be together...

    because i guess if you believe in God it is true. very outstanding writing keep it up
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by withouthope | [ Reply to This ]
      Because it's random thoughts it is really hard to critique this. I think maybe if you plan to use this as a poem, break up the lines and spell owrds out instead of using numbers. This is only if you plan to turn this into a poem one day. As for thoughts on this, I hope you move on in life and find peace from the closure formed by you not waiting on this guy anymore. I've been there and understand. Sometimes, those break ups are for the best, this one might be also. Hang in there.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I am still in love with someone who isn't mine anymore too...you asked for thoughts...so here are mine..
    i got hurt once a long time ago, so i stopped finding people i wanted to be with and just found people to date for a couple weeks and lose. it is fun, at least at first..thats what i thought i was gettting into with my girlfriend(now x..but i'll get to that l8r)Candi..just another fun turn in the road. but i fuc.ked up..i fell so hard for her it almost kills me now. We dated alittle over a month, then she left me for her X gf(who treats her like [censored] btw and beats up on her)and told me she still loved me but had to figure out her feelings with Kensie(thats her X)first. I said okay..she asked me if i'd b here and i told her i would not choose anyone over her, that i loved her..
    well Kensie tried to hurt Candi(my now X)and beat up on her in public and the relationship ended. today. then my X got another gf.
    so i am in ur shoes...or at least i can sort of relate, not understand, what hell u r going thru
    "what did i do wrong?" "whats wrong with me?" "why'd they treat me like this?"
    All hthese things are running through my head as well.
    im sorry if this was a sucky comment..i was just trying to let you know that i relate to you and im here if u ever need anyone to talk to.
    xoxo,
    reeses
    p.s. check out some of my stuff or private message me. or both. ty
    | Posted on 2006-03-10 00:00:00 | by 2Numb | [ Reply to This ]
      I remember being this girl..I remember feeling this way..and it is truly the hardest thing ever. To love someone and to know that their heart belongs to someone else is a really tough thing to face. I think the quote at the end really added to the piece...great job. And keep the faith...the same guy I thought I could never have...I've been dating him for four years now..so sometimes it IS meant to be. Good luck. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2006-08-02 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]



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