Description: Sometimes nature reminds us that we are not the lords of the earth. My grand daughter inspired this poem. She had several phrases that she could use in a poem. Tectonic plates was one, but not the one she chose. I realize that this is not really a haiku as it does not have the 5-7-5 structure, but I was unsure what else to call it.
This is a good nature haiku. The only suggestion I can give you is that you need one more syllable in your last line to make seven. I really dont care for rules in poetry but I think it is suppose to have seven in that line. Otherwise a moving haiku about a very seriously tragic natural occurance. I actually watched a two hour special the other night about this on the discovery channel. It was really fascinating and informative. Nature can be so beautiful yet also so catastrophic as well. Take care.
This was very good. I never seen a haiku done in a 7-5-7 meter. Very interesting. Ron is right, you did use 6 instead of 7. This was very easy to follow and spoke so much truth. I live in a city in CA that was struck by a tsunami 40 something years ago. And to see the pictures of the damage and stare at the Pacific ocean, only makes me appreciate you haiku more. Again, this was very good.
Ok Lynn, I walked all the way over here to read this poem, now explain to me what Tectonic Plates are so I can understand it better. I feel like it has something to do with the earth shifting during an earthquake. Tsunami's are so destructive I just don't think I would want to live anywhere there was a chance of hav'n one. !doc'
I liked it. It has that cool little intertwining of science and poetry in like. It good as it is but maybe you could add a few more Haikus with it about the same thing to go with the main idea to tell somewhat of a story. That could really capture the destructiveness of a tsunami. Good poem and great subject! Keep writing! -Jess
This is creative Yes a tsunami is dangerous and can bring death to many But I like how you showed the rains also bring new life Now dont get me wrong I am not saying tsunamis are all good But I believe you were trying to find a positive to a negative And that my friend I give you credit for God Bless Ron Also Not that I am trying to nitpick but the last line only has 6 beats insted of 7 you might want to go back over that line and add But that my friend is totally up to you Ron