Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Nationdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 89/92/41
    Words: 17
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
    Total Views: 916
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 142



    Description:
       Without a doubt the shortest piece I have ever written. However, I believe it is as long as it needs to be.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsNationdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Crumble
    Rebuild
    Fortify
    Defend
    Make haste
    An enemy at the gate
    Rebuild only to crumble again




    Submitted on 2006-03-11 07:41:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      There are not many poets who can write this sort of terse poem and do it effectively but I must say you are one of them. In about 15 words you are able to some up the destructive and recessive pattern of nation and in your mindset what it means to be a nation. This is quite good I must admit and commend you greatly on this piece. I feel those are the stages that many nations continue to follow almost like an interminable cycle. Great job.
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by Versifier | [ Reply to This ]
      Very explanitory(sp?) I think its a very..true short piece. I dont think it needs to be any longer really. Good job!
    inkpen
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    94608

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry