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    dots Submission Name: Mommydots
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    Author: bbcakes1115
    ASL Info:    22/f/ut
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 35/27/16
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Some thing to my mom. I just remember her coming to save me when I had a bad dream. I hope it brings back wonderful memories of your mom or yourself if your the mom. Enjoy.


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    dotsMommydots
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    It's two a.m. I awake frightened.
    I scream from a horrible dream
    "Mommy!" I cry " Mommy!"
    She rounds the corner to my room.
    A gown of white and hair in curls
    Coming to my rescue

    Oh sweet deliverance
    She comes to me from restful sleep
    A voice of an angel, she sings.
    " Rock a bye, Baby!"
    Her arms caress me.
    Comfort, safety, and a feeling of joy.
    Her unselfishness and love, devotional.
    My angel of mercy.

    I hear her heartbeat.
    "Thump; Thump; Thump!"
    The smell of a soft summer breeze,
    and a voice as sweet as honey.
    Wisk me to peaceful sleep.
    My mother, my savior;
    I love you MOM!




    Submitted on 2006-03-11 15:48:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nicely done! This really has a childlike quality to it that makes it very sweet and innocent.

    I lost my Mom to cancer 2 years ago and I've written many pieces about her life and my struggle with losing her. In fact it was writing poetry about Mom that brought me to Elite Skills and I suppose whenever I see a poem about "Mom", I instantly think of my mom.

    Many of the words you've used here apply to my adult relationship with my mom
    Comfort, safety, and a feeling of joy.
    Her unselfishness and love, devotional.
    My mother, my savior;
    I love you MOM!


    I'm old enough that most of my childhood is lost to time and I don't remember a lot of small childhood things. I have nights like this with my sons and I can picture the same exact scene 40 years ago with me as the little guy and Mom coming to comfort my fears. I guess I really appreciate the light you've thrown on late nights, that I'm sure I shared with my mom.

    Beautiful piece, I wish you many more



    Steve
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww, this is so sweet. And yes, I think you've captured well that moment. Moms are wonderful creatures!
    | Posted on 2006-03-12 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]
      that's sweet I'm sure your mom really appreciates you and this poem and i agree with mimi it is written in a childlike voice but that's what gives it that good memory feeling. Good job.
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by nique | [ Reply to This ]
      written with a childlike voice.. it reflects your memories well an dI am sure your mom was happy to read this and kow how you feel
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]


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