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    dots Submission Name: Dust collected memoriesdots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDust collected memoriesdots
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    I use to be able to talk to you, you were my best friend. So many adventures, so many memories. I cried on your shoulder, my tears soaked your skin. I held you in my arms,you were my comfort, my reassurance when I felt like the world was beging to end. Childhood memories of you and me. Now we don't talk, Im forgetting all the times we use to play. New memories taking over. I have someone new to cry on, to reassure me. Now you sit upon my desk, collecting dust. Lanceloch, you were my best friend, my teddy.




    Submitted on 2006-03-11 16:20:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked the poem in the sense that it was going to be about friends and that the use of poetic devices in a simple context was quite good although the ending with the teddy surprised me as I thought the ending would be a bit darker than what was written as mentioned in the above comment, column written is best but that will come in time good effort
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by Binkygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      I hate it when that [censored] happens. We always lose friends and gain new ones. That is one of the sad parts of life. This is a nice write. But to tell you the truth I like poems and stuff in colom form
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]


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