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    dots Submission Name: Misty Eyed Maskdots
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    Author: Broken Angel
    ASL Info:    26/F/AZ
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 373/333/64
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsMisty Eyed Maskdots
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    Looking through misty eyes
    With my clouded mind
    I've only found darkness,
    Caressed By lonliness
    Battered hands touch my swollen breasts.

    Fingers slim and scarred by time
    Feel their way to the light,
    Enveloped in black gravity
    Steel fists to tired to fight.

    Misty eyed mountains
    Hollowed by caverns of pain,
    Cloud covered peaks
    Blinded by rain.

    You ask "Is this your drug of choice?"
    But you still don't see the change.
    Standing still
    but moving to fast to grasp,
    To live today
    Is to big a task, so please don't ask

    Accept my grotesque flaws
    Or abandon your hearts desire,
    Look into these misty eyes
    Can't you see my souls on fire?

    Burning for the wholeness
    Of one mans hands,
    Clawing at the directness
    Of your forgotten demands.

    My pyro of hate
    My breeder of lies,
    Tell me can you see
    Will I lie or compromise?




    Submitted on 2004-05-03 22:51:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I don't know...but, this poem..does not feel funny in anyway. More like fuzzy, yet, I don't mean that meanly... It is just the serious, feelings that are felt when reading your poem. Your word working is very creative.
    | Posted on 2004-05-06 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great poem, very well structured and the rhyme and scheme of what u had to say is very creative!!!


    Latin King!
    Keep your writing... No Doubt!
    | Posted on 2004-05-03 00:00:00 | by Latin King | [ Reply to This ]


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