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    dots Submission Name: Love Storydots

    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This one goes out to my MOTHER!!!

    ONE LOVE!!!

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    dotsLove Storydots

    I knew her since the beginning of time,
    Her life-line,
    Connected with mine,
    And no matter how many days went by,
    I was always number one on her mind;
    She offered me her care,
    Her love was gentle and kind,
    Nothing can compare,
    As to what her love offered me in time.

    Struggling with two lives,
    She managed to love me,
    To people it was a strive,
    To her I meant the world indeed.

    Like a rose, I began to bloom,
    And regardless of such lovely tomb,
    I was happy to take room,
    In a place that I wouldn't occupy soon,
    She was my first home,
    And like the stars are born from the moon,
    My love story unwraps,
    And reveals itself,
    Straight from the womb.

    Submitted on 2004-05-03 22:55:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very sweet. I was so into the last five lines and then boom, you spelled it "whomb." No h. Threw me out of the flow, I'm so anal-retentive about spelling. That's really the only thing. ;

    ~ Niphredil
    | Posted on 2004-05-03 00:00:00 | by Niphredil | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice.. I love seeing a nice sweet poem once in awhile. depressing ones all the time, tend to bring ya down good job
    | Posted on 2004-05-03 00:00:00 | by Broken Angel | [ Reply to This ]

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