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She Waits

Author: adnil
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Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I just kind of throw this together,it might of course need a few changes,but a very special friend gave me the idea for this piece hope you like

She Waits

Tigress beautiful and sleek
Her coats as soft an silky as velvet
Though she's often gentle yet never meek
You can't keep her for a pet
Tigress fierce,protective and territorial
She waits patiently for her unwary prey
Her unsheathed claws leave behind many a memorial
Oh beware! of the tigress oh don't stray
You can't out run her, she's the best of hunters
For her keen eyes are sharp and miss nothing
Nor can you out wit her
For she stalks her prey inch by inch absorbing...
All its quaking fear
There's no hiding once she's gotten your essence
Then she'll over power you ounce for ounce
As even in the dark she see's your luminescence
Oh yes a hungry Tigress awaits to pounce
Beware of the staking tiger or you'll find
She's taken a big bite out of your behind

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  I could read this one metaphorically but choose instead to think of the jungle and its great tigress. Thanks for taking me there and warming me up on this cold, wintry day. :-) Sharon
| Posted on 2007-12-26 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh yes, the majesty of the tigress...

You capture the feelings well in this.
A patriarchal lion rules with pride by the feminine of the tiger is true power. It roams free and fierce.

I enjoyed reading this ever so much.

Nice work.

| Posted on 2006-03-18 00:00:00 | by beatthedrum | [ Reply to This ]
  Nothing more majestic, or lethal as a stalking tigress. Well written Linda - it reminded me of 'Jungle Book' and Shea Khan.

| Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  Haha! a tigress stalking her prey, a feminine charm with feline grace. A creature of bountless energy, who's gonna eat you if you stray! Nice piece! I could actually visualize a short clip of a tigress prancing around, and then starting to stalk her prey. However, I feel the write would be better if you fleshed out how she was "gentle, but never meek" That'd give the poem an extra edge! Nice!
| Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by unREMb | [ Reply to This ]
  I love this! I think you did a great job with your chose of words and attention to details. It made for a very beautiful read. I loved the imagery! I think your friend would be very proud and honored you did such a thing for her. This to me paints a picture of a strong woman, not willing to be a pushover. The flow was sexy and fluid...alot like your friend. lol. Great job darling...just purrfect.

| Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
Sounds like a wicked lady this tigress..gonna do all them things to me. But ya see I have nothing to worry about because I don't stray, I'm a good boy!
That way I protect my behind!
Did I cover myself pretty good o this one?
| Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]

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