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    dots Submission Name: Flea Market of Doubtsdots
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    Author: Ethan Brody
    ASL Info:    27- M - Dunsinane
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 356/166/55
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 379
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    dotsFlea Market of Doubtsdots
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    Gosh, if I didn’t have a pen
    And a paper to write on,
    I would be dry and surely die,
    Life is too cruel to get by
    Without the soothing ink
    - That calms what’s wrong.
    Our minds are too complex,
    Our thoughts too whirling,
    And at times twistedly erratic.
    Every so often I reckon
    - That I’m going nuts,
    For I don’t fathom,
    The way the wires,
    Are pulled and connected.
    My mind says something,
    I don’t want to do,
    My heart yells for a cure.
    My conflicted spirit
    Wonders in a desert
    Of doubts and bemusement,
    And is badly attacked
    By the callous winds
    -That are felt as daggers
    Trespassing human flesh,
    Snapping my easily cracked bones,
    And fraying my nerves, no less.




    Submitted on 2006-03-11 23:20:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ethan,
    "My pen is the cure for the disease that is the world I dwell in", kinda thing, right? As I see it, you would not be such a poet if you were not a conflicted spirit. Thank you for this thought provoking piece...

    In Silence and In Sound,
    Torie
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by lebeauvide | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this
    I wrote a poem once where I referred to the pen as my medicine
    It is true writing can release sadness and almost any illness
    It is the reason I put in a lot of comments
    Keep writing as it helps heal
    Very Nicely Written
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      You had me to the end of the write (which may need a little tweaking to make the overall effect a bit more biting; perhaps 'snapping my easily cracked bones and fraying my nerves, no less'). In any case, you've narrowed down one among many reasons why writers are so fond of pen and paper (or Word documents), it is soothing to write both the troubling and wonderful events others overlook in a single moment. This was one of the finest writes you've ever posted on the site. Very nicely done. Take care of yourself. Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-03-11 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]


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