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    dots Submission Name: back in the day (verse two)dots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dotsback in the day (verse two)dots
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    departure, flows like a river
    the tears are gone now
    once strong, I figure
    to come back I won't allow
    I'm trying to say only what I think
    and not be infected
    but your Ideals are in the pond which I drink
    your illusion, directed
    sickness into my mind
    I won't let you be
    I'm strong, and you'll find
    there's more to what you see
    nothing can allow this
    racism isn't what I do
    I try to tolerate this twist
    but in the end I will be killing you
    aggresion isn't my aim
    but see it must be utilized
    as you, I"m not the same
    I'm not your prize
    I won't be surrendered, thats been stated
    where am I to go
    your ways are over rated




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      i don't think i've ever see u rhyme like this. with a kinda ABAB rhyme scheme. u used it pretty well. yeah racism is a [censored]. it doesn't matter what color ur skin is. just because ur white doesn't mean u can't like rap. y'all buy the most rap records any way. culture should be a way of expression not just where ur from and the color of ur skin
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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