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    dots Submission Name: Dance Floordots
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    Author: darkwinged
    ASL Info:    17/F/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 184/217/74
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1197
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1030



    Description:
       This is a metaphore. And it's more uppity, I think, not as depressing/death i usually do.
    Tell me what you think, kay?


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    dotsDance Floordots
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    Dancing
    On the Dance Floor,
    Moving to the beat
    Of Life.
    Watching everyone
    Dancing to their own beats.
    Some slow,
    Some fast,
    Together
    And alone.
    All moving
    As one body,
    Yet everyone
    Is by themselves.

    Dancing moderately,
    Not too fast,
    Not too slow,
    Various guys ask me to dance
    I will dance with all of them
    To find the one
    That matches my beat.
    And when I find him,
    We will dance together
    Forever
    Alone.

    Dancing with friends,
    Some are too fast
    Some are too slow.
    I'll stick around
    With the ones that
    Match closest to my speed,
    Because I know
    They will never
    Let me down.

    And as I dance
    I will speed up
    And slow down
    As Life comes at me.
    Looking for
    My dance partner
    To help me keep a steady
    Beat.




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      Indeed, a metaphor for life! We need that harmony that is sooooo difficult to attain... finely done... bravo... bravo..
    | Posted on 2008-04-15 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Like it, like it, like it a lot.
    I love dancing.
    I love thinking that life is a dance, and the person you spend it with is the one who matches your beat.
    What a wonderful thought.
    This is great!
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      Looking for a dance partner or a life partner? Hehehehe, I can't believe I made you think about this... Wow, so many boys want to dance with you:P Good luck in finding the guy who matches your 'beat'!
    From this side of the Atlantic...
    Saaber
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by Saaber | [ Reply to This ]
      good imagery and the metapaphore here is good too .. well .. keeop writing and hope you get what you want ... good luck !
    peace and love!
    cee ya !
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      It is interesting, this metaphorical dance. It is written simply, but it is quite profound piece. I love when you say, “We will dance together
    Forever
    Alone.” There is a certain everyday wisdom in these lines.
    I would only suggest binding some of the lines, especially in the first stanza.
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      Bravo! You id it! This was just wonderful. It was indeed a great metaphor of life and how it can be viewed. You did a great job with keeping the simplicity of what you meant and how the dance of life effects you. I love the way you made sense with each contrast of being alone, yet with others on this dance floor. Totally different from your previous work and I'm damn proud of you. This is a fav. I knew you had it in you. Keep it up when ever you can.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this because i LOVE dancing. i can dance to any kind of music and it still feels natural. i also like the metaphors..it takes dancing to another level that ive never viewed it as. my favorite lines are:
    Looking for
    My dance partner
    To help me keep a steady
    Beat.
    -that's what lifes about, right? finding the one that completes you. ah, this was a great metaphor! i havent read any of your previous work but if this is a lot different i suggest variety, because you write very well like this. an absolute favorite! again, great write and keep it up = )
    take care
    birdy
    | Posted on 2006-03-12 00:00:00 | by birdy5005 | [ Reply to This ]


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