Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Colorsdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: mugsy
    ASL Info:    68/M/Sooke/ B.C./Can.
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 138/106/35
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Misc
    Total Views: 908
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 342



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsColorsdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Scarlet was redder then
    And brilliant green
    Not now so bold
    And blue
    Of far away seas
    Near now
    But not then,
    For my part a cause
    To wonder,
    What of gold
    The gilded moon,
    Not so distant after all
    The mystery gone
    Or simply
    A lack of illusion....




    Submitted on 2006-03-12 18:50:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      HI again Mugsy,

    Scarlet was redder then
    And brilliant green
    Not now so bold
    And blue
    Of far away seas
    Near now
    But not then,
    For my part a cause
    To wonder,
    What of gold
    The gilded moon,
    Not so distant after all.


    I loved this --except I think it would be stronger without the last three lines. It seems like an attempt to explain why the mystery has left but it doesn't really do that. As for me, I'm satisfied with leaving it a bit of a mystery.

    I feel crappy criticizing your poetry because I think you have a wonderful way with it and an obvious talent, so who am I to tell you anything -- but I guess that's what we come here for. Right?

    Annie
    | Posted on 2006-07-12 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]
      You really manage to evoke colour in this, you can almost feel the intensity of the natural pigments. well done, a really effective piece. charlie x
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by Charlie Poppins | [ Reply to This ]
      Simple, yet complex, I like this, this is a deep one, I had to read It all before I got it. The format is nice too. It seems like you really did think about it, and it shows. Great Piece! *Keep up the great work*

    Singlerose:)
    | Posted on 2006-03-12 00:00:00 | by SingleRose | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem truly makes be think. It is very deep and it looks like you put a lot og thought into it . . . . . The imagery was great, too.

    < U n p e R F e C t 3 3 3
    | Posted on 2006-03-12 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful.
    You have quite that way with words and as of this piece (def. a new favourite) I am intriqued to read more.
    Your word choice diction and imagery are just fabulous in this piece
    bravo.
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by NeonOrangePrize | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    94728

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Sunt Mala Quae Libas written by MyPeriodical
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    A Fire! A Knife! A Black Crow Calls! written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Unfortunate Reality written by TeslaKoyal
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Incubus written by monad
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    This written by Chelebel
    Still written by HisNameIsNoMore
    You Make Me speechless written by elephantasia
    Genesis written by saartha
    Skulls Beyond the Palisade written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Limbo written by HisNameIsNoMore
    On Top of a Water Wheel written by Wolfwatching
    Faith In Line written by MyPeriodical
    I'm here written by BloodtornAngel
    Lunch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    By the bar written by expiring_touch
    ME written by jjd
    Tides of Man written by HisNameIsNoMore
    On Loop written by Daniel Barlow
    To the Epilogue written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Aftermath and Waltz written by HisNameIsNoMore
    When Crows Tick on Windows written by metallichick786
    In the end written by Janesaddiction
    All Time Low written by Janesaddiction
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Convergence written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Commencement written by Ramneet

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry