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    dots Submission Name: REVISED REBIRTHdots
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    Author: ladyngold
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 585/520/99
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsREVISED REBIRTHdots
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    REBIRTH


    Beautification disrobes
    both eyes remain open as
    Phoenix lighted all darkness.

    Legends of people like myself,
    riding on golden winged horses
    stampeding the 3rd heavens.

    Holy fine gold dust cascades
    anointing me with unspeakable joy
    as I spoke in unknown tongues.




    Submitted on 2006-03-12 22:44:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this could be much longer? Not that I did not like it , because I enjoyed it very much!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-03-24 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      You can definitely feel the passion in this work. I love the whole idea of the pheonix being reborn from the ashes and love the fact that you brought it up in this poem. Spiritual rebirth is a rebirth from ashes(in my opinion) so I think it really fit here. Love the way your words made the poem come to life as I read it. Very good piece.
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by lostpoet25 | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked the first just as well but you do a nice job with this one in your revelation and attitude. May all your dreams be golden girl!
    Enjoy this day!
    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I remember this piece from a few weeks ago. I think you still bring out the beauty of being reborn and cleansed by God. This was clearly spiritual and uplifting. The imagery was very good. It could see all the heavenly bodies renew souls and hearts of others and pronunce them clean. And the joy of that makes one speaks in tongues. This was very good.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Every time I think of a rebirth I think about the phoenix. Nice to see it was mentioned it in your write.

    This is a very uplifting write. Not super-duper "happy-giddyish"...but just that soft and tranquil "whooo-ha-ha!" that comes from a subtle smile of contentment. Very good stuff Cheryl.
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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