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    dots Submission Name: The Windowdots
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    Author: brich2929
    ASL Info:    30/M/Delaware/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.06 - 27/18/10
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 134
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 691



    Description:
       This was written in a time of sorrow about a girl I dated briefly. The relationship went south pretty quickly due to the fact that we were prematurely intimate and the girl apparently was disappointed in herself and me.


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    dotsThe Windowdots
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    The Window


    On the verge of the open window
    Opportunity to boundless limits
    Its springtime and new beginnings flourish
    This mystery girl is revealed to me

    The window opens and I rush in
    Such a new experience
    This love of mine
    The apex of it lies
    To me unknown

    One night of mistakes
    And the peak falls to abandon
    And so it goes
    My window starts to close

    She shuts me out
    And flies away

    And soon, too soon
    Its someone else’s window
    Which closes not

    At least not for now.




    Submitted on 2006-03-13 03:05:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked this rich because of the images. I have to disagree with jesture. I think the flow is good the way it is. It makes perfect sence. Very beautiful.
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Peachpitt | [ Reply to This ]
      The poem is good but I dont like the ending flow on each verse. It threm the whole poem off. I did like it throughout the rest of the verse thow. I think if you changed the last line and redisgned it the poem would turn out alot better
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by Evil Jesture | [ Reply to This ]



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