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    dots Submission Name: Bitter Worlddots
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    Author: bbcakes1115
    ASL Info:    22/f/ut
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 35/27/16
    Words: 28
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 794
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 184



    Description:
       This one is from about 9 years ago that I wrote just while thinking about things. Its short but sweet let me know what you think.


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    dotsBitter Worlddots
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    A deep burning
    In a cherished heart
    A sacred longing
    in a silent soul
    A wasted dream
    in an aged mind
    Constant change
    in a bitter world




    Submitted on 2006-03-13 10:50:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the way you write stright from the heart The poem was stright and right to the point little word of advice when your writing from the heart search deep close your eyes and take a deep breath and focus on what ever your writing in other words make you words feel. i hope you understand what i'm saying. try it out and let me know how it works also come check out my page maby you can help me out!
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by emcgehee78 | [ Reply to This ]


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