Bitter World

Author: bbcakes1115 ASL Info:    22/f/ut Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 35 /27 /16 Words: 28

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Bitter World

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A deep burning In a cherished heart A sacred longing in a silent soul A wasted dream in an aged mind Constant change in a bitter world

Submitted on 2006-03-13 10:50:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I like the way you write stright from the heart The poem was stright and right to the point little word of advice when your writing from the heart search deep close your eyes and take a deep breath and focus on what ever your writing in other words make you words feel. i hope you understand what i'm saying. try it out and let me know how it works also come check out my page maby you can help me out!

| Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by emcgehee78 | [ Reply to This ]

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