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    dots Submission Name: The race is ondots
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    Author: bbcakes1115
    ASL Info:    22/f/ut
    Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 35/27/16
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 759
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 431



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       I was asked by a teacher to write about racing and well this is all I could think to write. Let me know how it makes you feel and if you think I could have done anything different. Thanks


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    dotsThe race is ondots
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    My foot hits the pedal
    I smell the smoke from the tires
    Speeding by the other guy
    I know I am going to beat him
    But does he know
    Soon I loose control of the wheel
    I am in the air
    tossing back and forth
    My head smacks the steering wheel
    I never thought it would end like this
    I hear the sirens
    but it's too late
    The car explodes and I am gone.




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