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    dots Submission Name: Love is not like Anythingdots

    Author: LoveToHateMe
    ASL Info:    20/girl/Philly
    Elite Ratio:    4.61 - 175/148/42
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLove is not like Anythingdots

    Don�t pull me close, it�s been awhile.
    You can look at me but don�t dare smile.
    I'll just get mad, I just let go.
    Now pull me back and push me low.
    Take me down, ill let you in,
    Ill let you be my darkest sin.
    I can�t say no, I know I'm sick.
    Ill say it low, our secret.
    Misconceptions, lies untrue.
    Our lies are now our only truths.
    Touch my chest and burn a hole,
    so you can see into my soul.
    Vulnerable to be abused,
    I want the pain of being used.
    Just to feel, that�s all I need.
    So cut me now and watch me bleed.
    I can�t resist, it�s been too long.
    I miss the days of doing wrong.
    So pull me close, it�s been awhile,
    And let me die in your smile.

    Submitted on 2006-03-13 11:32:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      me=worst stalker ever

    this starts off with the speaker angry at the person she's with. i like how she eventually stops caring about whatever she was mad about cause she's with that someone, the someone that she can't stay mad at cause thay mean so much to her. she just lets go because she loves 'em so much, nothing they do matters...

    (woah,sorry about that, i started interpreting and couldn't stop...)

    "Our lies are now our only truths."
    i have a strange attraction to this line that i can't explain...

    only thing that i have to ask about:
    "I'll just get mad, I just let go."
    should it be 'I'll just let go'? you know, to go with the whole future thing who've got going on... but maybe not.

    i gotta go comment on like 200 (gross exageration) more of your poems, so i'm gonna end this now.

    i <3 u,
    | Posted on 2006-04-12 00:00:00 | by MyFairCalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      that made me...cry.,..it moved me. It made the emotions i have been trying to hide so visible. How do you describe with such...perfection. You leave me at a loss for words. Thats how much i like this. Good Job man.
    | Posted on 2006-03-17 00:00:00 | by I_m not Broken | [ Reply to This ]
      "Misconceptions, lies untrue.
    Our lies are now our only truths.
    Touch my chest and burn a hole,
    so you can see into my soul.
    Vulnerable to be abused,
    I want the pain of being used."

    That's my favorite part.
    The whole thing is waaay beyond fabulous, but that part just stuck out the most for me.

    I'm not feeling very wordy now, so I'm sorry if this comment sucks. But I just had to tell you how much I like it anyway.

    You are disgustingly talented.
    (In a good way. I use disgusting as a compliment... it means I'm jealous lol)

    As lovely as it is, it managed to make me kind of sad. But then again, most things do, so it's all good. (I'm not medicated today. Theres a shocker.)
    But anywhoooo, as always, the wording and everything is marvelous. Thats right... marvelous.
    Very beautifully done


    "Inviting others to laugh with you while you are laughing at yourself is a good thing. You may be the fool... but you are the fool in charge!"
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... this was something new for sure.. the are some powerful lines in the peice... my personal fav are...
    "Touch my chest and burn a hole,
    so you can see into my soul".
    amazing imagination.. well done.. looking for more cool stuff from you...
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by nnehriya | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This was powerful!
    I absolutely loved it...
    Everythign just seemed to go together soo well.
    The rhyme was absolutely PERFECT...
    Except that I seemed to get sex out of it more the love...

    <3 Adalae
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]

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