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    Author: sandman
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    In the time you take
    to read this
    In the words
    my soul
    Touches yours

    Somewhere in
    another time of life
    Iíve awaken
    a thought in you

    Rise
    once again
    a lost spirit
    I have found in this
    Sacred letter

    Reach out and touch
    that special friend
    that you long for

    Sweep away
    the teardrop from
    the corner of your eye
    feel the whisper
    of their breath
    upon your skin

    Surrender
    unto me your moment
    of silence

    Capture the spirit
    that has awakened me
    to sooth you
    and the tear stained pillow
    you rest upon




    Submitted on 2006-03-13 15:24:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this poem of yours. I like the different approach you have to writing. I also posted something here very similar to this long time ago but my style is much darker: http://www.eliteskills.com/z/12010 Have you written anything recently? Post some if you have, I'll be glad to comment on it. I haven't been here in ages but I see there is still some life left in this place...
    | Posted on 2016-10-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very great.
    | Posted on 2012-10-04 00:00:00 | by ladyinredheels | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good piece, I honestly believe that you have captured the spirit of what every poet feels as he/she writes.


    Sage
    | Posted on 2012-01-25 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
      O but for the poet who knows their soul. poe
    | Posted on 2011-01-13 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice as always. Look forward to being back and reading some more of your work. A true talent with words. Desi
    | Posted on 2011-01-12 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]
      Cool! This is a wonderful poem about poetry!
    I havent read a poem with this theme that captured the same connection that this poem has. You've shown how a reader sees the words, but feels the soul of the writer.
    Any poet can string pretty words together, but a great poet puts their soul into the words in such a way that the reader cannot miss each and every nuance of the poet's thoughts.
    Wonderful!
    (By the way, I think you meant 'soothe' and not 'sooth' in the last stanza)
    | Posted on 2010-04-16 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      the short lines work very, very well in this poem and add a wonderful rapidity and intensity to the poem... a nice job here!!!
    | Posted on 2010-03-10 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      very good poem I truly enjoyed it I just think it could have been more vivid and could have had a better rhyme scheme, but all in all I enjoyed it.
    | Posted on 2009-02-28 00:00:00 | by Doublefeather | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm so glad you posted this again. This was my first favorite when I joined and still is.
    Love,
    Christie
    | Posted on 2009-01-28 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is just a very excellent ode to poetry. With it, we have the power to reach out and touch another soul, to share our feelings, to create new kinships!

    Excellent!
    | Posted on 2009-01-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      HI! im so glad that i thought to stop by and check in on whats new with you Sandman, and some one as already said this but what do you tell the man that knows every piece he writes is absolutely perfect, this is brilliant, and very true, your an amazing writer, glad i came back to find a beautiful write~Joy
    | Posted on 2008-07-22 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this a lot. I think I'm gonna add it to my favorits lolx. It makes me want to cry just so I can feel that peace lolx.

    HL
    | Posted on 2008-01-12 00:00:00 | by Heidiluv | [ Reply to This ]
      awakened not awaken?
    | Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      what do you tell the man who already knows that every piece he writes is the very best? youre right it has been a long time since we talked....to tell the truth...i been living inside myself for the past year. love to hear from you again soon...and thanks for the comment on tyler...sadly it is true...but i am ok and came through it strong...

    message me soon,
    becka
    | Posted on 2007-11-26 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]
      That was great, it was very deep. :]
    I'm not good with feedback at all.. But I can tell you that I admire you already, even if the only things I've read from you are: a comment you gave me and this. Still it was very nice:
    "Capture the spirit
    that has awakened me
    to sooth you
    and the tear stained pillow
    you rest upon"
    That was the best part from my point of view, you know? most of the time I don't read the poems completely, but I decided to read them completely now. :) and this is just lovely. I've never been one to like the end, but i liked the end of this one :D

    with insanity,
    Sofie
    | Posted on 2007-11-12 00:00:00 | by Broken-lands | [ Reply to This ]
      That was great, it was very deep. :]
    I'm not good with feedback at all.. But I can tell you that I admire you already, even if the only things I've read from you are: a comment you gave me and this. Still it was very nice:
    "Capture the spirit
    that has awakened me
    to sooth you
    and the tear stained pillow
    you rest upon"
    That was the best part from my point of view, you know? most of the time I don't read the poems completely, but I decided to read them completely now. :) and this is just lovely. I've never been one to like the end, but i liked the end of this one :D

    with insanity,
    Sofie
    | Posted on 2007-11-12 00:00:00 | by Broken-lands | [ Reply to This ]
      That was great, it was very deep. :]
    I'm not good with feedback at all.. But I can tell you that I admire you already, even if the only things I've read from you are: a comment you gave me and this. Still it was very nice:
    "Capture the spirit
    that has awakened me
    to sooth you
    and the tear stained pillow
    you rest upon"
    That was the best part from my point of view, you know? most of the time I don't read the poems completely, but I decided to read them completely now. :) and this is just lovely. I've never been one to like the end, but i liked the end of this one :D

    with insanity,
    Sofie
    | Posted on 2007-11-12 00:00:00 | by Broken-lands | [ Reply to This ]
      your stuff is always good. i fear that my comment will not be as good as the tons of comments before me because all i really have to say is that its very good but im not surprised because your stuff rocks.
    | Posted on 2007-04-15 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]
      wowowowowowow!!!!
    i really like this. and your right it did touch me some what. as i normally say that hurts which means i like it!!!
    | Posted on 2007-03-23 00:00:00 | by yamifox | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really a lovely poem and touches the reader as if the poem were written just for whomever is reading. It's soothing, encouraging, and just plain beautiful in thought. In line 8, I'd suggest "awaken" should read "awakened." :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, im speechless. its a beautiful piece, and i cant find any other words to describe it. my favorite stanza is this below:

    Sweep away
    the teardrop from
    the corner of your eye
    feel the whisper
    of their breath
    upon your skin

    it portrays, to me at least, a sorrow-filled love. the whole piece made me feel serene and calm. congratulations on an excellent write. =]

    - Michi
    | Posted on 2007-01-23 00:00:00 | by _Phoenix | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, as always im left speechless, i have no words for this because it is so beautiful and so true. i think that my faveorite stanza is:
    "In the time you take
    to read this
    In the words
    my soul
    Touches yours"
    and the stanza that gives me shivers is this one
    "Sweep away
    the teardrop from
    the corner of your eye
    feel the whisper
    of their breath
    upon your skin"
    imnot sure why this one gives me chills but it does. great work sandman once again
    Joy

    | Posted on 2006-10-16 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Sandman, I still think your in my head. I've had 2 deaths in my family, and my mother just had 4 bi-passes. This poem hit close to home.

    But as always,
    GREEEEEEEEEEEEEAT write.

    illusions
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how you express what the reader is supposed to get out of it. Soothing, yet firm. And as Epiphany said... dreamy is a good word for it.
    | Posted on 2006-08-22 00:00:00 | by BeautifulGrace | [ Reply to This ]
      hi i loved this, its kinda wierd to think people you will probably never meet can touch you in a such a way,
    thanx for sharing
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-05-04 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      "In the time you take
    to read this
    In the words
    my soul
    Touches yours

    Somewhere in
    another time of life
    Iíve awaken
    a thought in you"


    so true! this poem that you wrote can mean absolutely nothing, or it could mean everything to somebody! no matter who you are you will think of something different each time you read it! very versatile, and beautifully written! great write!

    ~chaos~
    | Posted on 2006-07-20 00:00:00 | by whispered_chaos | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very nice poem and quite thought provoking. We touch each others lives in so many ways every day, perhaps even when we dont mean do or dont realize that we even did. And in a spiritual kind of way this poem captures that. It's kind of like when you meet someone for the first time, yet there is this nagging suspicion that you have met them before. There is a sort of familiarity to them that you just cant place. Reading this put a smile on my face. Its sentiment is really sweet. Very nice job. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-03-30 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... ive been away for awhile and i come back to a great write by you. you never seem to dissapoint your readers and give them peices that are deep and filled with emotion that can reach every reader on some sort of level ive said it before and ill say it again you have an immense talent thank you for sharing it with us. as for a literal sense i dont think there is one thing in this peice that i would suggest that you change. take care....Joy
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      I really think this is a great write...the words and images you used and the images of two souls touching...I think they are great...

    Ally
    | Posted on 2006-06-20 00:00:00 | by Ligeia83 | [ Reply to This ]
      the opening to this is just awesome. that alone speaks on so many levels to anyone that has ever written anything that means something to them. as a whole, your piece was great, but as for myself, i'll walk away remembering the opening stanza.

    great job
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      It's so....so....smart. Like it's not written about something stupid it's just very well written with a very good idea. I love it! You could not have written it any better. I'm so amazed that someone could write something this intelligent. Great job!! &#9786;

    Lucky
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by luckyms20 | [ Reply to This ]
      That's a very profound and true statement in this piece - tis true the energy we share with one another and although most of us may never meet we perhaps have in another time
    I really enjoyed this dreamy piece!
    love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I actually really liked this, a lot. I dont know, it just speaks to me. Hah, i've always wanted to say. Er..yeah. I can see why you titled it poetry. I think..
    Theres just something about it, I cant find any words to describe it right now for some reason. But its BRILLIANT. Is that good?
    inkpen
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]


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