HI! im so glad that i thought to stop by and check in on whats new with you Sandman, and some one as already said this but what do you tell the man that knows every piece he writes is absolutely perfect, this is brilliant, and very true, your an amazing writer, glad i came back to find a beautiful write~Joy
what do you tell the man who already knows that every piece he writes is the very best? youre right it has been a long time since we talked....to tell the truth...i been living inside myself for the past year. love to hear from you again soon...and thanks for the comment on tyler...sadly it is true...but i am ok and came through it strong...
That was great, it was very deep. :]
I'm not good with feedback at all.. But I can tell you that I admire you already, even if the only things I've read from you are: a comment you gave me and this. Still it was very nice:
"Capture the spirit
that has awakened me
to sooth you
and the tear stained pillow
you rest upon"
That was the best part from my point of view, you know? most of the time I don't read the poems completely, but I decided to read them completely now. :) and this is just lovely. I've never been one to like the end, but i liked the end of this one :D
That was great, it was very deep. :]
I'm not good with feedback at all.. But I can tell you that I admire you already, even if the only things I've read from you are: a comment you gave me and this. Still it was very nice:
"Capture the spirit
that has awakened me
to sooth you
and the tear stained pillow
you rest upon"
That was the best part from my point of view, you know? most of the time I don't read the poems completely, but I decided to read them completely now. :) and this is just lovely. I've never been one to like the end, but i liked the end of this one :D
That was great, it was very deep. :]
I'm not good with feedback at all.. But I can tell you that I admire you already, even if the only things I've read from you are: a comment you gave me and this. Still it was very nice:
"Capture the spirit
that has awakened me
to sooth you
and the tear stained pillow
you rest upon"
That was the best part from my point of view, you know? most of the time I don't read the poems completely, but I decided to read them completely now. :) and this is just lovely. I've never been one to like the end, but i liked the end of this one :D
your stuff is always good. i fear that my comment will not be as good as the tons of comments before me because all i really have to say is that its very good but im not surprised because your stuff rocks.
This is really a lovely poem and touches the reader as if the poem were written just for whomever is reading. It's soothing, encouraging, and just plain beautiful in thought. In line 8, I'd suggest "awaken" should read "awakened." :-) Sharon
wow, as always im left speechless, i have no words for this because it is so beautiful and so true. i think that my faveorite stanza is: "In the time you take to read this In the words my soul Touches yours" and the stanza that gives me shivers is this one "Sweep away the teardrop from the corner of your eye feel the whisper of their breath upon your skin" imnot sure why this one gives me chills but it does. great work sandman once again Joy
"In the time you take to read this In the words my soul Touches yours
Somewhere in another time of life I’ve awaken a thought in you"
so true! this poem that you wrote can mean absolutely nothing, or it could mean everything to somebody! no matter who you are you will think of something different each time you read it! very versatile, and beautifully written! great write!
This is a very nice poem and quite thought provoking. We touch each others lives in so many ways every day, perhaps even when we dont mean do or dont realize that we even did. And in a spiritual kind of way this poem captures that. It's kind of like when you meet someone for the first time, yet there is this nagging suspicion that you have met them before. There is a sort of familiarity to them that you just cant place. Reading this put a smile on my face. Its sentiment is really sweet. Very nice job. Take care.
wow... ive been away for awhile and i come back to a great write by you. you never seem to dissapoint your readers and give them peices that are deep and filled with emotion that can reach every reader on some sort of level ive said it before and ill say it again you have an immense talent thank you for sharing it with us. as for a literal sense i dont think there is one thing in this peice that i would suggest that you change. take care....Joy
the opening to this is just awesome. that alone speaks on so many levels to anyone that has ever written anything that means something to them. as a whole, your piece was great, but as for myself, i'll walk away remembering the opening stanza.
It's so....so....smart. Like it's not written about something stupid it's just very well written with a very good idea. I love it! You could not have written it any better. I'm so amazed that someone could write something this intelligent. Great job!! ☺
That's a very profound and true statement in this piece - tis true the energy we share with one another and although most of us may never meet we perhaps have in another time I really enjoyed this dreamy piece! love,peace,joy&smilez 2 share tif
I actually really liked this, a lot. I dont know, it just speaks to me. Hah, i've always wanted to say. Er..yeah. I can see why you titled it poetry. I think.. Theres just something about it, I cant find any words to describe it right now for some reason. But its BRILLIANT. Is that good? inkpen
Submission Name: Poetry
