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    dots Submission Name: Magic of a Storydots

    Author: adnil
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 514/286/57
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       thought I'd post a change of pace,I was just rembering how me an my cousins used to play pirates,only I was never a pirate I was a girl and gals are bad luck on a ship ha I was the serving maid the one to bring them there ale(ice tea) ha

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    dotsMagic of a Storydots

    Dreamed of sailing the seven seas
    As I sat upon my Grand-fathers knee
    Of pirates of old and their many glories
    For he often read me of such stories

    With their swords and cutless knife
    Captain Kidd and Blackbeard came to life
    Fighting on the sea until a ship was sank
    And having a mutineer walk the plank

    Feeling the sea wind blowing in my hair
    And doing only things that a pirate would dare
    Tasting the spray of salt upon my face
    All within Grand-fathers loving embrace

    Pirate ships and sailing I've a special fondness for
    They remind me of a time I'll not see anymore
    Always will I remember Grand-father reading to me
    Of adventurous men that sailed the seven seas

    Submitted on 2006-03-13 17:55:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was a delightful little read, remembering your grandfather and the stories he told you about pirates and such. i have some wonderful memories of my grandfather as well, mostly teaching me magic tricks. they are wonderful memories that we carry in our hearts when our loved one is long gone.

    thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      What a delightful poem about fun on the seas and more so just going back to when we were kids. Half the things I did as a kid I would be scared to try again so I guess I'll have to learn some new tricks when I start into my "second childhood"
    I enjoyed read'n this, now if I could just figure out how I got in here, I would know the way out!

    Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm so happy you did write about a childhood memory. You spoke with such awe and fondness recalling your days on the ship, ha, that we, the reader felt it too. Great flow and just beautiful rhyming and imagery. I think mentioning pretend games is a sure way to reach all your readers, for we all have one. This was perfect. I think you are a great story teller also. It must run in the family. Great job Linda!

    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Haye to the JOLLY RODGERS !!!!! ( that's the name of the skull and bones flag by the way !!)

    I really liked how your text was kind of nostalgic but light and positive at the same time. All along the text I was trying to put myself in the body of a young girl dreaming to be a pirate... that was a good exercice !!
    Nice work here !
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by Aceofthedice | [ Reply to This ]
      awww this is warming to the heart. its nice to read a positive story about something so dear. i loved the flow and the rhyme scheme they really complimented each other.

    i can see how this jogs our memories of times when we only wished we could be again. luckily you havent taken this for granted... good work keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by withouthope | [ Reply to This ]
      Haha, my cousins and I had a scary story thing that ALWAYS started out with "Once there were 3 girls eating cheese and crackers..." Sorry, first thing I thought when I read your description

    ANYways! back to the poem. I miss my grandpap...
    ya, ok. I liked this! (no need to say that) U love the rhyming, and how imagination can take us anywhere. Good thing imagination is, yup yup!

    ~Kat (sorry..I'm a lil hyper..)
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by MorbidAngel114 | [ Reply to This ]
    Said I to my crew! But as all good sea worthy captains...I knew what to do!

    I liked this and I enjoy it when the lil pirates in my head come out and tell me stories too.

    Very GRRRRRRRRR8 write matey! And how the stories of our elders creep into our heads and send vivid images. Nice job on that part too!

    DAAAARRRRRRRR! Me be swashbucklin' too!
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Great job! Reminds me of the time when I was a kid and love to read all those stories about everything and anything. great imagery and flow to the poem too. :D I had this image of a little girl who's jumping around and full of energy, and the kindly old granpa who's always by her side. Not difficult to catch the whimsical and devil-may-care magic in the poem. Good job!
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by unREMb | [ Reply to This ]

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