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    dots Submission Name: A Teenaged Thoughtdots
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    Author: Hip-Hop Honey
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105/86/31
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 757
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 390



    Description:
       This is just an inner thought of how I feel about this thing with Mylo sometimes..And well also how I fet after my best freind Kayla gave me some advice I would want to consider hope you like it


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    dotsA Teenaged Thoughtdots
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    She's waiting on a dream
    That may or may not come true
    All she wants is to be with him
    And for him to tell her it was worth the wait
    Is her waiting on this dream real
    Or just a wild thought on a smooth sail
    In the end she will always be loved by him
    So is this dream real
    Or just a teenaged thought
    That she thinks is real




    Submitted on 2006-03-13 18:59:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree with Logan, it is good, but if he's telling you to wait isn't that a good thing? Well I don't actually know the whole thing so ignore me. I liked it alot though, its sad to. And I like your visuals like: "Or just a wild thought on a smooth sail" Very unique. Good work.
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by emoxday | [ Reply to This ]
      I hella need ot catch up on my comments This had a really good idea crys it just could of had more added on too it. You've had a tendoncy to end your poems without getting all your emotions across I know your situation with Mylo and I think you could of added alot more to this to show how much you really felt but it is a good start to what could be a relly good poem keep it up crys

    =Logan=
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]


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