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    dots Submission Name: Death and the Winddots
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    Author: marigold
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 182/203/89
    Words: 520
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsDeath and the Winddots
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    Winds: Old we are, so very old,
    and blowing, blowing,
    through the mountaintops,
    and whistling, whistling,
    through the rolling valleys green,
    and singing, singing,
    in the primal forests dark.

    oh stay us, stay us
    if you can!
    and catch our waving, waving hair!
    like dreams forsaken
    flying, flying,
    none can touch our flowing mantles.
    through the midnight palace laughing
    laughing, we will chase the thunder,
    we will catch the drunken lightning,
    and whirling, whirling,
    split the day asunder!

    Old we are, so very old,
    and blowing, blowing,
    through the mountaintops,
    and whistling, whistling,
    through the rolling valleys green,
    and singing, singing,
    in the primal forests dark.

    person: winds, oh winds, but hear my voice,
    but listen to my halting words!
    but stay your roaring, dancing flight!
    but heed my formless longing's plight!

    winds: we heed no mortal plea,
    we stop for no forsaken flesh!
    so onward, onward, laughing
    laughing, we will forward fly!

    person: oh winds! but see you not my tears,
    the darkness clinging to my face?
    oh stay, but stay,
    don't flee from me!
    the echoes of my voice you take
    and compass in your delirious dance,
    oh stay, but stay!
    you leave me, ah!
    your laughter is receding,
    your song is dying,
    oh stay, but stay!

    Winds: we hear no mortal voice,
    we stay for no despairing plea!
    blowing, blowing, laughing, laughing,
    we dance to the pipes unheard!

    person: but tell me, tell me, laughing winds,
    when will we meet again,
    when will you cast your whistling splendor
    upon my murky sorrow?

    Winds: we'll come, we'll come,
    to raise the dust upon your grave,
    with song and laughter,
    we will make it dance,
    the dust upon your hoary grave!
    we'll sweep it in a frolic mad,
    and to our whirling delirium
    we will make it dance!

    person: but winds! that is not soon!
    before then will you not come near?
    unless it be I die so soon,
    and pass into the shadow realm.

    winds: oh soon! yes soon!
    the aeons are but naught to us!
    we smile at the flight of time,
    we laugh at the trudge of years.

    to raise the dust upon your grave
    we'll come, we'll come,
    the dust upon your tomb will dance
    to our blowing, whistling voices!

    and now away, away we fly!
    come winds, come winds,
    no longer can we stay,
    no longer can we stay!

    chorus of winds:

    Old we are, so very old,
    and blowing, blowing,
    through the mountaintops,
    and whistling, whistling,
    through the rolling valleys green,
    and singing, singing,
    in the primal forests dark.

    oh stay us, stay us
    if you can!
    and catch our waving, waving hair!
    like dreams forsaken
    flying, flying,
    none can touch our flowing mantles.
    through the midnight palace laughin
    laughing, we will chase the thunder,
    we will catch the drunken lightning,
    and whirling, whirling,
    split the day asunder!

    Old we are, so very old,
    and blowing, blowing,
    through the mountaintops,
    and whistling, whistling,
    through the rolling valleys green,
    and singing, singing,
    in the primal forests dark.




    Submitted on 2006-03-13 21:01:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow. That was really original. That wasn't sarcastic, it was really original. Lol. Its kind of long, but I guess it has to be that long to really get the point across. I really like how ...the winds were talking to the person. And how you repeating words such as laughing laughing and flying flying and whirling whirling. I liked how it didn't rhyme, you really kind of freestyled it. Great job. You made it interesting the whole way through so I kept wanting to read. Thumbs up!
    inkpen
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]


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