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    dots Submission Name: I Love Youdots
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    Author: wewak11
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 3436/3630/329
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 1000
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsI Love Youdots
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    I love you when we wake up in the morning
    I lay in bed and watch you while youíre dressing
    Coz sometimes with your stretching, scratching, yawning
    Your nightie rides right up, itís such a blessing.

    I love you when youíre cooking breakfast for me
    Some waffles, bacon, two eggs over easy
    You bend and stoop, pretending to ignore me
    But I know that youíre really acting sleazy.

    I love you hanging washing out to dry, dear
    My special treat each Thursday, sometimes Mondays
    Coz darling, when you reach up I just die here
    And thank God that you donít like wearing undies.

    I love you watching late-night television
    You fall asleep and snuggle in your white chair
    I always need to make the big decision
    To take you off to bed or take you right there.

    I love you when weíre shopping in the food store
    You reach to lift a product from the freezer
    I sneak up from behind and with subdued roar
    Deliver what you might say is a teaser.

    I love you every day, 24 Ė 7
    You feel youíre getting fat and old, what twaddle!
    I love you coz Iím living in a heaven
    To me youíll always be a supermodel.




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      lol Aww that's cute.
    (Hah I love the picture of the flasher up there. I just noticed it. lol)
    But anyways, I got a good laugh from that. Cause it starts out all cute with "I love you," but then hearing the reasons why just made it funny.
    The ending was perfect too.
    As always,
    Very nicely done

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      This has such a light hearted feel to it and lovey dovey as well. makes me think of a couple that just got married. Hopefully this is where you are ify our married... its seems oh so lovely. thanks for sharing this piece i really enjoyed the fresh breath of ait. chat at ya soon. amber
    | Posted on 2006-03-26 00:00:00 | by amber_in_wyomin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is real funny I like it. I love how you were able to keep the rhyme and rhythm through out not to mention the funny. And that picture, real funny stuff man. Keep up the great work and have a blessed day.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      a very masculine point of view, fun to read...dont often find such stuff on eliteskills...good u have broken the barrier...i really enjoy ur humourous pieces!
    keep it up
    mihir
    | Posted on 2006-03-20 00:00:00 | by mihir | [ Reply to This ]
      sweet
    i liked the feeling it gave.
    dunno if i'ts comedy though
    but a whole bunch of feeling you must have for your woman.
    thank you
    | Posted on 2006-03-19 00:00:00 | by Morticus | [ Reply to This ]
      hey Graeme it was a good one .. a very good one ... sometimess we think that way .. when we see the years passing by and we love even more our girl ...
    take care ... and keep wriitng you are a good one and thanks for sharing !
    and if you have a chance please take a look to my writings...
    peace and love!
    Victor
    | Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved it...it was kinda funny and romantic at the sametime..something i find is hard to be...and especially to write about...lol..but you managed...it made me giggle after a horrible day
    <3 krin
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Krinchinian | [ Reply to This ]
      That was come*dic* but oh so cute "IT's" really nice to love the little things (& the not so little things! muwahahaha) that make life & a relationship work and keep the spark going. Great, as usual!
    love,peace,joy& smilez 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      you're a little bit crazy Graeme but have an enchanting sense of humor. my husband has a thing for grocery stores too--now who in there right mind would want to do it there? you two I guess! anyway, I enjoyed your little love ditty but I think your wife might boff you one.
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      My bf just said all those things to me a few months ago. This was so sweet. We girls think we need to be all made up and and wear sweet perfume to get ya'lls motor's running. and that's far from the truth as this poem shows. It rang so true in my life, that I'm smiling recounting moments I knew I was just unkept and unladylike and those were the time the boy ravished me. You are right, love don't focus on hollywood looks but the simple things that make the female her. Her beauty comes from within and radiates outwards 24/7. I loved this, is was simple and romantic. And it was like reading my old diary of good memories. Thanks for reminding me I'm a supermodel no matter how much time goes by. you done doggone did it again!

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, those lil things she does that are the coolest! All sorts of things you mentioned and I am sure there is a whole lot more. Very sweet and fun write Graeme. I liked the last three lines the best. Cool beans maynard.
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, you love that pic at the top of yoyour poem, don't you. (and if i have some very bad typos, sorry, i don't have on my glasses) That was ab love poem, as well as one with a little bit of comedy. It seem as you really lovve teh person that you are writing about and it seems as if they love you a lot too.

    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      
    So you didn't know which category to pick hu? Well it does have comedy to it,and on the other hand I think it is a love poem. Then it seems to me you were serious about what you said, so maybe we need a new category that say , serious-love-comedy...
    I enjoyed the read Graeme...
    !doc'
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      For a man (after all those years together) to still love, enjoy, and be turned on by watching his wife do menial chores, is a wonderful thing.
    You captured the joy of sticking it out with that special someone and how each day can bring a new thrill.
    I love the humor in this.. and I can almost feel your excitement as you admire the simple things about her. And the fact that, without even trying (or does she?), she stills floats your boat

    A good one Graeme, you should definitely show this to her.. and be turned on yet again, by the big smile it brings to her face.
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, how sweet! I wish that someone would write me a poem like this. This is wonderful... A totally original ode to a loved one. I hope she appreciates what a funny, creative fellow she gets to be with. This was fantastic, keep it up!
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      This was one funny poem, which illustrates why we love who we love: it is not because of their perfection, but because of their peculiarities. You never stray from your topic, which makes this a poem with an excellent flow. This is an entertaining read, but I think it lacked something deep, transcendental if you get what I mean. I know that was not your intention, but I just like poems that force one to think from a new point of view. Well done mate! This was excellent...
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by HansRik | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! you really have your way with words! wait... that sound's wrong... :P It's well written, sexy without being sleazy. No extra cheese, just the meat. Very fun and entertaining. Two thumbs up! Guys like you break men's reputation, cos you drive up everybody's expectation! haha, thanks for sharing this incredibly entertaining write. Cheers. Bann
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by unREMb | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this poem, i think it's great. yes i agree with Chell that you should put this in the comedy category. i think it's funny, but of love also. so "comedy-love" i also like the animated picture that comes with this write, it's funny.

    i would love to marry a guy like you. it's comforting to know that there are guys like you out there. i'll be old and fat one day and i would love my husband to think the way you are in your write.

    thanks for making my day better with this write.

    suzi
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by sushi wok | [ Reply to This ]
      *Chuckling....*

    Very cute, you horn-dog! I didn't even notice the repetition of "I Love You" at the beginning of each stanza, my attention was so focused on the peep-show being layed out before me.

    I think it fits in comedy,

    Chell
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      That was a real cool one graeme...so calm and confident. I really belive you, know doubt you are livin' in heaven. I'm grinning as I'm writting this. Very happy poem.
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by basement gypsy | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this Graeme,its going in my favs I had to laugh at the last verse cause there are times when I too think I'm getting old and fat,and my guy says no your just getting sexier ha I'm going to have to have him read this thanks for the lovely read
    adnil
    | Posted on 2006-03-13 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
      This is adorable! :)
    | Posted on 2006-06-14 00:00:00 | by Suffer Well | [ Reply to This ]


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