Kill Flying Chickens

Author: Jody Dean ASL Info:    19/m/Cornwall Elite Ratio:    3.68 - 9 /15 /5 Words: 69

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Kill Flying Chickens

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I said to Mr Chicken Why can't you fly? He told me this and he told me that But he never told me why Are you scared of gaining height? Is flight just too demanding? Will you try and fly tonight? You can't be happy standing Then I realised why they don't Fly so fancy free... instead of flying they're all frying Down in KFC

Submitted on 2006-03-14 02:45:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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HAHAHA! The ending is a little gruesome, but this piece is really cute. I like comedy pieces that rhyme, it just works so well. I can’t imagine how bored you were or what inspired you to write this piece, but the result is very entertaining! Only one suggestion: In the first line of Stanza 3 “realised” should be “realized.” Otherwise, nice job! -Cari

| Posted on 2006-04-26 00:00:00 | by prettybaby | [ Reply to This ]

HAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHA this was hella funny it was simple yet it was almost a bit suspensful! yeah i really wanted to know why the chicken couldnt fly, wanna know whats sad though? from all the dark and gothic poems ive read i was really expecting something sad at the end forgetting this was a comedy so when i read "instead of flying they're all frying Down in KFC" I cracked up! this was awesome congrats A needed laugh Harmageddon

| Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by Harmageddon | [ Reply to This ]

lol this is cute...dont worry, i have alot of time on my hands too...i thought about posting a comedy on cliché'ness, but eh, i dont think it'd come off as funny as i think... anyway, nice job on cuteness..gave me a smile, and makes me feel bad for eating chicken lol

| Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]

I loved the straight forwardness of this poem. Sorry but not much to nit pick here. I enjoyed this, just wasn't enough of it, lol. Short and sweet and straight to the point. Made my day. Darn it all, now I want chicken.

| Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Man in Black | [ Reply to This ]

This has an almost nursery rhyme simplicity that is charming. It flows beautifully and that inner rhyme on the 'flying ... frying' works well as does the alliteration on the f. I wonder if a coma rather than the connective 'and' would work better on the third line of the first stanza. Neat poem, love and peace nessie

| Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]

* laughs out loud again * I am in the mood of reading comedy and this is like the third one I've read today. Your's is the second best! It was fun to read and the flow was simple. The rhymes seemed a bit forced, but what is a comedy poem without rhymes I really don't know what else to say besides: 1. Great job 2. Thanks for sharing 3. Abbas

| Posted on 2006-03-15 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]

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