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    dots Submission Name: confusiondots
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    Author: my pain
    ASL Info:    16/F/aust
    Elite Ratio:    5.55 - 191/123/39
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 757
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       rushed job not much meaning to it was kinda bored


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    dotsconfusiondots
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    the blood stained curtins,
    seem to reach out and cry,
    the blood drips as tears,
    and yet the girl on the window sill smiles.

    Her eyes flicker
    and she moves into the kitchen,
    the kitchen a maze of pots and pans,
    she slowly walks on passing them one by one.

    her face lined with tired lines,
    she finds herself in a state of unknowing,
    perhaps she's real or perhaps she's not,
    to exhusted to think she falls to the ground.

    her thoughts confused,
    she curls up into a ball....waiting,
    waiting for the end, waiting for the beginning.
    it seems she lays on the ground waiting for eternity.




    Submitted on 2006-03-14 03:03:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like how you piece flowed, it wasnt your typical ABAB pattern you took your own thing and made it work for you, good piece really definately sad, I loved it.

    Ciao,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes, very angsty. I think you would like the site www.teenangstpoems.com. Full of angsty poems that now adults wrote when they were teenagers.
    -HaldirLives
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by HaldirLives | [ Reply to This ]


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