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    dots Submission Name: Tolerancedots
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    Author: delusional
    ASL Info:    42
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 75/98/18
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 809
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       I've been friends with this person since we were kids- He knows my heart probably better than anybody. This one is for him.


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    I've known him all my life
    his heart remains the same
    so he doesn't walk or talk like you:
    For THIS he should feel shame?

    Put a stamp on his head-
    If it makes you feel better;
    He's a queer, a homo, a fag-
    printed in big red letters.

    Doesn't make you more valuable-
    or confirm you're all man;
    You're like the multitude of others
    who fear what they cant understand.

    Long before he recognized
    the self he tried to hide
    I cried tears with him in silence
    while he scaled this great divide.

    A little tolerance is in order:
    not one of us is so refined
    to shun the hidded jewels amongst us
    found with open hearts and open minds.




    Submitted on 2006-03-14 09:00:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very Beautifully said
    I have a vision in my mind and heart of World Peace and I fully realize this vision cannot become reality until we learn how to accept people for who or what they are
    Though I am not gay I see nothing wrong AT ALL with gay or bi people and just wish people would look more closely at themselves and correct their own faults rather then pointing out what they perceive to be someone elses faults
    God Bless
    Ron

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    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I always liked Mr. Katz. Still, he is quite the flamer isn't he... (lol) Tell him I said hi next time you guys talk.

    Jason
    | Posted on 2006-04-08 00:00:00 | by Jason The Basta | [ Reply to This ]
      Sooo hippy like... I really like this... Very cute and loving and all. Too bad this reality you speak of, this tolerance is only written so sweet in poetry and out of the mouths of idealists.
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by manicsmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem lets a lot of anger and passion shine through. Although I did not like that poem as much as I liked your others, I jst want to say that you have a very good way of making others feel your emotions. The rhym,e is mostly very good as well and the flow very good worked out.

    Anyhow, there are gay people who feel ashamed. A lot.
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Yara Lorinda | [ Reply to This ]
      Gay people are not ashamed to be gay it is ignorant straight people, who are ashamed of them being gay. I must say that it was a good write though keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by dustinamoody | [ Reply to This ]
      I to think this could apply to anything or anyone considered different from what you are use to and automatically dislike. It is a shame that being gay is such a taboo subject and unaccepted on a whole. I think you did a great job speaking up and in defense of your friend. I could sense the underline anger here and impatience with others for not waking up and opening their minds and hearts. Blunt wording and direct and powerful flow. Good job Heather!

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      It's funny how the United States seems to be so advanced in most ways but yet is so prudish...you would think intelligent life would be beyond going so crazy over sexuality by now, wouldn't you?

    But then again...it's not just about that...I mean, take the first few lines of your piece here:

    "so he doesn't walk or talk like you:
    For THIS he should feel shame?"

    This could be about ANY difference...such as a handicap or a deformity or disease of some kind that just makes a person DIFFERENT from others that some people just can't seem to help themselves from attacking. When I read those lines I thought instantaneously of someone that I care about a great deal who is crippled and deformed by an agonizing disease and what he has to put up with every single day just to try to live a "normal" life...and yet inside, he is the most beautiful person I know...

    This was a very heart-felt and gracious write.
    | Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]


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