Lamentation by HansRik

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Author:	HansRik
ASL Info:	19/male/United Kingdom
Elite Ratio:	5.93 - 78/55/9
Words:	83

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	170
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	613

Description:
Lament: a cry of sorrow and grief.

Acrostic: a poetic form in which the first letter of every line forms a word. Other types of acrostics include poems where special letters (such as the last one of each line, or one following certain punctuation marks) form phrases or words which reveal a poet's secrets.

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Lo! The labyrinthine loneliness prevails
As an absurd allusion to discord.
Meandering senselessly in pain and what it entails,
Every syllable is lost, forever, and so is every word.
Not one shadow plays with fragile rhymes;
Trembling silence is thence, laughing.
And ah! The sweet fables are narrated by endless Time...
Time, the immortal enemy of Life's being.
Ineloquent notes are mourned by blurry silhouettes,
Originating from nothing, for nothing is visible yet.
Nay! The labyrinthine loneliness laments its true set.

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  I have heard of acrostic poems, but once again I have never seen one on this site. You know what??? I really like you as a writer. You seem to a uniqueness that adds to the mix of people here. You are almost like an inspiration, and a leader to younger poets like myself. I loved how you said "meandering senselessly in pain and what it entails" The imagery was nice, and everything was good except for one thing. I think that you mean "illusion" instead of "allusion" Other than that great job!
~Alyssa~
| Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a piece that I really enjoyed reading. I truly like the flow and the way the words just kind of rolled along the page. I must admit that this style is not one I choose to use in my writing, nut I really like it here. I enjoyed the read and I thank you for sharing. Keep up the good work.
| Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by lostpoet25 | [ Reply to This ]
  In this write
I see someone who would like to escape into the beautiful world of books
Someone who is never satisfied with the knowledge they have learned always eager to learn more
Ones imagination is a beautiful thing
It can create a great new world eager for ones mind to intercept
God Bless
Ron

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| Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I like acrostic poems...I dabble with them myself at times. I loved this for the sheer writing. I not sure if the lametation is the art of writing going down the drain or something more sinister here. That was my only drawback, I could not fully understand the poem itself. But your writing was excellent and the flow was superb. you had great use of imagery. It just went over my head. lol. Great work.

Maggie
| Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked it. Like I like being alone, it is easy to learn about yourself when you are alone. When people are around we pay to much attention to the small things and make it hard to learn about yourself.
In a serious relationship a point can be reached where you can have this learning with another person, but that is because you feel totally comfortabel.
| Posted on 2006-03-14 00:00:00 | by dustinamoody | [ Reply to This ]

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